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Title: Through the Storm 15 Aug 2016 6:08 pm
Reviewer: Kendra Dhyanna (Signed) [Report This]
    Fue una gran manera de acabar la maldición, de hecho, una gran apertura para la determinación severus de ser un mejor padre.

    Pero sin duda estoy muriendo de ganas por ver a severus en los recuerdos que la dejó Lily.

    Espero que puedas publicar y actualizar pronto

    Author's Response: Don't worry, Severus will look at the memories eventually. He's been kinda busy lately. I'm working on the next chapter, though I'm not sure when it will be ready to post.

    Thanks for reviewing! :)

Title: Through the Storm 14 Aug 2016 8:23 pm
Reviewer: Dark Inu Fan (Signed) [Report This]
    "Potter, stay behind and close the door. I wish to speak to you about your performance in class today." *waits for door to close* *Hugs Harry and doesn't let go* "You did well today, my son. If you have no plans this coming Friday, I wish to have dinner in my quarters with you." A little OOC, but something I can see them working towards. To the rest of the school, it would be 'detention', but those two would know better. "Now go on, I believe you have Defense next and I will not be writing out an excuse for you."

    This was definitely a waking up chapter. Severus was getting the clue that Harry's home life wasn't all roses, but going into his mind and seeing even a portion of the physical effects, that really woke him up to the reality that his abuse was -a common occurrence- and something he was honestly used to and almost came to expect, in one form or another, from every adult that he came into contact with. (And the few that don't, confuse and scare the shit out of him, but he treats them like gold. (The Weasleys (sans Percy) and Hagrid Primarily.))

    About halfway through the dreams, I had a thought and I started praying that they stopped before Harry got to school-age abuses. I don't think his body could have delt with a second round of Basilisk venom. Even pseudo-venom. Even as painful as it was, I'm glad that Severus was able to pull Harry out when he did. And, with seeing what his past was like 'first-hand', I suggest some positive-reinforcement touch therapy from now on. Because, really, very few people have ever touched him without the intent to harm. (I imagine that is why Hermione tackle-hugs Harry every chance she gets. Because she doesn't do it to Ron, I've noticed.)

    Author's Response: Ya know, I wondered what would happen if the curse progressed that far when I was writing the chapter, but decided to cut it off before the memories of Hogwarts. The curse would have lasted too long and it would just be a drag.

    Hmm I can't really see Snape easily giving out free hugs lol, but yeah maybe they can work towards something along those lines. Especially now that Severus has seen Harry's home life.

Title: Through the Storm 10 Aug 2016 9:37 pm
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    I loved how the curse was resolved. Well done. :)

    Author's Response: Thank you! :)
Title: On the Edge 10 Aug 2016 1:00 am
Reviewer: helga1967 (Signed) [Report This]
    Yes! Good turn of events
Title: The Final Departure 10 Aug 2016 12:22 am
Reviewer: helga1967 (Signed) [Report This]
    Family so cruel, need a extra lesson. Harry has reduced expectations and high hopes in Harry,s maind. To be crushed and reconstructure in the future. Good description of the situation It will be a rough road.
Title: Discussions to Tantrums 09 Aug 2016 11:53 pm
Reviewer: helga1967 (Signed) [Report This]
    Brother rivality. Confrontation yes. Harry need love.
Title: Upending Revelations 09 Aug 2016 11:42 pm
Reviewer: helga1967 (Signed) [Report This]
    Interesting no only Harry have a live father but a brother. Poor Snape two instantaneous son.
Title: Summer of Misery 09 Aug 2016 11:31 pm
Reviewer: helga1967 (Signed) [Report This]
    Strong start.
Title: Through the Storm 08 Aug 2016 11:03 pm
Reviewer: waitingondaisies (Signed) [Report This]
    The wait for this chapter was well worth it! The effort you put into it is obvious; this chapter is amazing. You very practically resolved the curse, it didn't feel rushed or contrived at all. My favorite part of this chapter was the moment where Severus finally gets through to Harry and Harry breaks through the curse because it's so touching and you took your time building their relationship and giving them background that the moment didn't seem out of character at all. That being said, the end of this chapter is also really well done, I loved the introspection from Severus. To wrap an overly long and rambling review: I loved it and can't wait for more!

    Author's Response: Aww, thank you! I'm so glad you liked it! It took me forever to figure out how to deal with the curse and for it to make sense. That moment with Severus and Harry was also one of my favorites as well. In the end, I really wanted Severus to know what Harry's been through and realize that Harry does need someone to be there for him. Now hopefully the next chapters will come along quicker than this one.

    Thanks for reviewing! :)

Title: The Curse 01 Aug 2016 1:52 am
Reviewer: theatreofblack (Signed) [Report This]
    This is an excellent story. Thanks so much for writing.

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