| Title: Chapter 19: one last breath
| 01 Aug 2021 8:09 am
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| Reviewer: raidyn (Signed)
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Amazing chapter! I cannot wait for the next one. Please post soon.
| Title: Chapter 18: the kids aren't alright
| 28 Jul 2021 9:38 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you for updating, the pace is getting hotter in the story. Interesting that Severus sees that Draco is fixated on Ariel, I’d love to see the Malfoys reaction to that! I hope Hermione and Ariel get back to their previous relationship, it was so supportive for both of them.
| Title: Chapter 18: the kids aren't alright
| 24 Jul 2021 8:05 pm
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| Reviewer: raidyn (Signed)
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Absolutely loved this chapter! Keep up the good work, this fic is everything to me lol.
| Title: Chapter 18: the kids aren't alright
| 24 Jul 2021 5:18 am
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| Reviewer: Vadimmom (Signed)
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I found Snape stalking them amusing. As a parent, I totally get his need to do this. Draco and Ariel’s bickering was totally in character.
| Title: Chapter 17: shadow of the threat
| 14 Jul 2021 8:57 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Loved the chapter thank you. Ariel Is often so like Severus that it is uncanny, and the lovely thing is that they seem unaware of it. Thank you for updating and have a lovely summer.
Another chapter! Yay! I couldn't be more excited. Thanks so much for continuing this amazing story. It's my favorite at the moment, and I've probably reread it 3-4 times already. I love your characterization and how well you mix Snape's and Ariel's perspectives. It's just so well written. Cannot wait for the next installment. Poor Ariel, poor thing is losing it, understandably. Is the "darkness" aka Voldie, somehow connecting with the horcrux to bring about this anger and lack of control? Eep.
great job on the conv between severus & ariel!! overall great story!
| Title: Chapter 16: the rising deep
| 03 Jun 2021 2:00 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you so much for updating! I’m pleased I’m not wrong about Draco I find their interactions very interesting as it is so much more personal than in the books. I understand about Hermione being worried about Severus but I hope they make up soon, she is too good a friend for Arielle to loose.
| Title: Chapter 2: letters from someone
| 01 Jun 2021 5:37 pm
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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I loved this chapter! What a treat!!!
"Angry-Man?" Hahaha I love Ariel's first nickname for Snape.
Snippy is even better hahahaha!!!
I loved the casual use of the magic of emotions, having things vibrate, or float. Snape losing control like that was fun. Ariel is probably the only thing he really cares about. I'm not surprised he went ballistic. I'm glad Dumbledore apparated Snape away before he could accidentally hurt Ariel.
I find it hilarious that Dumbledore took Snape upstairs to "gather his thoughts" and cool off. And then all the booms and thuds. XD LOL "Redecorating." I thought it was funny when Dumbledore suggested he see if Petunia's kitchen needed attention too.
Poor Ariel thinking she's crazy though before they explained everything. And having an almost panic attack at going to Hogwarts and not having enough money. I love that Snape took her and reassured her in his own no-nonsense way.
I admit this chapter was really fun to watch.
There were a couple of tiny typos and such:
Ariel couldn’t if he’d gone because he was still furious for being locked in Aunt Petunia’s room, or because he’d felt Dumbeldore too.
WORD MISSING? Tell?
The attic door slowly creaked upon
OPEN
the lock fell off with a snap, and Ariel was starting
STARING
Author's Response: Adjfdsfksjdf thank you so much! Chapter 2 was one of my FAVORITES to write because of Snape being so over the top, with Dumbledore being his usual charismatic self while putting out a fire, and Ariel being confused as HELL.
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