| Title: Chapter 10: the veil opens
| 25 Dec 2020 11:30 pm
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| Reviewer: Gar (Signed)
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This is wonderful and captivating. I could not stop once I began reading. I really love emotionally destructive Severus so much. I cannot even begin 5o describe how deeply your writing has made me feel throughout reading this.
I hope you are well. I also hope you plan to continue this wonderful work. But even if you don’t, thank you for writing and sharing this amazing piece. Definitely one of the better fics I have read recently.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a thoughtful review! I do plan on continuing, it's just so hard to find time to write these days!! Emotionally destructive Snape is SO fun to write, but it's even more fun to make him FEEL things, mwahaha!
| Title: Chapter 10: the veil opens
| 30 Sep 2020 4:10 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you so much for updating. I loved the scene in the office, it reminded me of book 5 but Severus was way more destructive, I wonder how many others have tried to destroy the office?
The scene with the doe was lovely, I wonder how long it will take Ariel to connect the two events. Looking forward to the next instalment, please don’t stress yourself too much and stay safe at school
OH WOW!! First off, I hope all is well in school right now, it really is a scary time for teachers and students. I wish you all the best in teaching during these hard times.
This chapter was amazing! Leading up to it I was unsure of how you were going to address the fact about what voldy would do if he knew about the relationship. I think a lot of stories leave that out, and keep it as a huge plot hole. Since he can’t publicly be her father and a spy for Dumbledore at the same time. I cannot wait for more of this story! I hope you write one for every year of hogwarts!!
| Title: Chapter 9: lily: part i
| 17 Aug 2020 7:45 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very good interpretation of how they got together and Lily’s feelings for James. Thank you so much
| Title: Chapter 8: weight of living
| 10 Aug 2020 8:07 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you a truly dramatic chapter with a lot of angst, well done.
I dropped my phone in excitment when I saw that there was a new chapter to your story! (Phone is fine, lol) AND WHAT A CHAPTER! Oh my...the feels! I've actually reread it three times now to take it all in. I wasn't expecting Ariel to hand over the letter...I wonder if she even expected to, herself? (There's that fire!) I hope we get to learn the significance of the phrase in the letter that basically made Snape's head explode (lol). I loved the bit with the diagnostic spell...Ariel's reaction was so sweet. I imagine it reminded Snape of Lily and her awe of magic when she first learned of it. I feel bad for the both of them right now. I don't know who I feel worse for. Ariel has had time to somewhat wrap her head around everything, but she did just seemingly experience rejection from Snape, and that's got to hurt. Snape has lived all these years with anger, misery, and regret, knowing his role in Lily's death. As if that wasn't bad enough, he now has to teach the product of the union between the woman he loved and his childhood enemy...only to startlingly learn that HE'S Ariel's father! I don't blame him for about passing out. I can't wait to see the fall-out of all of this! Thanks for another great chapter!
| Title: Chapter 7: for those below
| 05 Aug 2020 7:02 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Great chapter. I remember reading a spoof School inspection report before book 5 was published, It was very funny especially about the health and safety aspect and didn’t like the way the teachers described the inspectors as “they who must not be named”.
| Title: Chapter 7: for those below
| 04 Aug 2020 4:11 am
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| Reviewer: Vadimmom (Signed)
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I’ve caught up since I was a few chapters behind. You’ve done an excellent job portraying Snape as a bitter but passionate person. You can really feel his pain as well as his anger. Ariel’s curiosity and spunk also come across well.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! :) We love bitter Snape
Favorite chapter yet! There was just SO MUCH to it! I loved the insight into how Ariel and Snape are mentally/emotionally handling "the letter," particularly how Ariel is struggling with how she feels about Snape (I'm getting those "father" vibes). And poor Snape. He doesn't like not being "in the know," especially when it concerns him...ESPECIALLY when Lily's name is being thrown about with his. I strongly feel like Dumbledore does know the truth, but if that's the case, why's he holding back? What's the point? Hmmm...I can't imagine him wanting Snape to be frustrated/angry, so there's GOT to be something else going on with that. And Ron...his reaction to Ariel's hug-could there be more than just a friendship in the future, perhaps? The ending scene was intense. I was wondering when/how the Voldemort/pain-in-scar would come in to play, and it was well done. Perfect timing for Snape to yet again save Ariel and for them to have a discussion...she is on her way to detention, after all. Thanks for another great chapter, fellow teacher-friend!
Author's Response: Oh gosh, thank you so much, fellow teacher friend! This was such a chore of a chapter to write, I don't know why!! But I'm really happy to hear you enjoyed it so much! Ariel is definitely struggling with how to categorize Snape, and Snape is struggling with... feelings, which is very on brand. Dumbledore knows more than he's letting on, but we'll get to that later on. I don't think Dumbledore intentionally wants Severus to be blindsided, but let's be honest, there's a .02% chance Snape will take this well, no matter how the truth comes out.
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