Such a great chapter!I look forward to more of this story! I really enjoy the direction you’re taking with love protecting Ariel and her needing it. In canon, I understood why Snape had to stay aloof with Harry, for the sake of appearances, but it always bothered me. Especially with Voldemort not understanding love, friendship, I think snape didnt necessarily have to be so cruel. Therefore, I am really enjoying the direction you seem to be taking with allowing snape to have some kind of relationship with the girl who lived all while still keeping her safe.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Love is one of the things I really wanted to explore here. In canon, Harry has this incredible capacity to love, and love is Snape's only redeeming qualities. I absolutely love stories where Snape is thrust into the role of parent and is forced to confront those emotions, but I've very rarely seen it done with a girl he viewed to be primarily Lily's. I'm excited to keep exploring this relationship :)
| Title: Chapter 6: axe to grind
| 06 Jul 2020 7:19 pm
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Great ending! I love the staff meeting, if that was what it was, and Severus’s musings very entertaining thank you
"You're killing me, Smalls!" Lol, I had to say that. I take it that Parvati and Lavender feel sorry for Ariel? It seems like they've picked up on "things" that Ariel hasn't noticed (or maybe just doesn't want to). I know not having pierced ears isn't indicative of not having a loving home, but it makes me wonder what else Pavarti and Lavender have noticed-and maybe even others? And Petunia ripping up Ariel's artwork...I'd see her doing that just because, but it does make me wonder what exactly was in the pictures. Flitwick dropping that tidbit about the letter! Plot-twist! Now we KNOW Snape HAS to get involved! He could've perhaps ignored the bit about Lily including him in her letter, but not this. Snape grabbing her wrist like that...I feel like he's taking her to Dumbledore, and who knows where that encounter will go! It also makes me wonder why Dumbledore is holding back on his knowledge about the truth of Ariel and Snape. Ugh. So many questions! Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: I think with Parvarti and Lavender, they're very much the stereotypical girly-girls, and Ariel confuses them because she doesn't know any of the latest trends or basics of being a normal 11 year old. I'm sure they've picked up on something not being quite right with Ariel, but they're kids, and assume she's just odd, but they do their best to include her. It just comes off the wrong way, sometimes. It's a maturity thing, too. As for Snape, you KNOW he eventually will have to get involved, or his head will explode. He can't handle anything, especially if all this Lily-stuff is being brought up after a decade. I feel bad, Snape really has no idea what he's in for!
| Title: Chapter 5: white blank page
| 27 Jun 2020 7:21 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you a wonderfully emotional chapter with a brilliant ending
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I got a p&s account Just to follow this. I love this fic so much and I'm so happy you updated!!!
Ugh, that cliffhanger! I can just imagine Snape's response to that...probably trying to maintain a somewhat cool demeanor while inwardly freaking out. I feel like he's going to try to stealthily get to the bottom of the letter, maybe by questioning Flitwick, because I know Ariel is going to go to him for help with the letter. I don't know if I want Snape to discover the truth quickly or not...I kind of like the tension between him and Ariel. It's definitely an interesting dynamic. And Ariel has the trunk back now from Dumbledore...I can't imagine he left the vial with what I assume is the Obliviated memory from Snape. I think Dumbledore knows, hence the way he looked at Snape at breakfast. Enjoy your break (I'm also a teacher!), and thanks for the awesome chapter!
Author's Response: I always imagine Snape's inward reaction to something that takes him off guard like that episode of Spongebob when he forgets his name, and there's all the little Spongebobs inside his head screaming while everything is on fire. Ariel revealing something about him being the letter at the very end is interesting, because on one hand, Snape doesn't want to touch it with a ten foot pole, but on the other, he really, REALLY wants to know. He just doesn't know what he's in for...
I'm enjoying writing the tension too, I wanted to be careful in not having the big reveal happen too early... having Snape and Ariel play this game of cat and mouse where they both think they're the opposite role is so fun. It's hilarious to see just how wrong they are about each other when I reread it, or plan out how they're going about this. It's the best part of writing, so far. I don't want it to end, but at the same time, Snape dealing with this fallout is going to be just as entertaining. He's such a hot mess express.
As for Dumbledore, one of my absolute favorite parts about canon is that Dumbledore knows everything, but is purposefully obtuse. I mean, c'mon of COURSE he knows about Snape, but as for what's in that vial... well, we shall see!
Kudos to you, fellow teacher! Thank you so much for the review! :)
| Title: Chapter 4: trolling
| 23 May 2020 9:32 pm
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Thank you an excellent chapter very well written
can't wait for the next chapter!
| Title: Chapter 3: unfathered
| 12 May 2020 9:58 pm
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Thank you a wonderful chapter
| Title: Chapter 1: girl
| 11 May 2020 9:20 pm
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Thank you very much a very interesting start to the story
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