I love how you’re showing how Holly and Severus are similar while still making them individuals. Maybe hatred for Tobias is something they can agree on.
Great chapter highlighting the various relationship dynamics at play.
Nicely written interactions between both friends and enemies.
Omg El capítulo ha estado genial, me encanta, de verdad. Sigue pronto, por favor. Estoy deseando que Holly y Harry se reencuentren y quiero ver la reacción de Snape al saber la verdad, también me pregunto cómo será su reacción al saber cómo han tratado a Harry sus tíos durante años y si se sentirá mal por eso. ¿Será capaz de arreglar su relación con su hija?
Another well-paced chapter full of detailed exposition and further character/relationships development (trying not to put spoilers!). But my absolute favorite scene had to be Holly & Draco and their gymnastics & jump rope antics!!! I kept laughing out loud as the action built upon itself, and even the adults got drawn into it! (Definitely not putting spoilers about THAT!!!) AWESOME!!! Can't wait to see what everyone gets up to next! 😂
| Title: Leave the Field Open
| 16 Nov 2021 2:19 pm
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Lovely ending! Even in cannon the love the Malloy family have for each other is obvious, but it is portrayed so beautifully in your story, and with such humour.
I love this interaction with the Malfoys and Severus but I must say I’m longing for when Severus sees Holly and Harry together. I think we got a hint of how it will be achieved in this chapter.
| Title: Olive Branch
| 04 Nov 2021 10:20 am
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That last bit sounds rather ominous to me!
Thank you so much for updating your wonderful story. I love Holly so much and can’t wait for Holly and Harry to be reunited.
An interesting fic!
Snape's hypocrisy is getting to me, though. Not just the fact that he was hopping in and out... and in and out... and in and out ... and in and out of beds and then accusing Jasmine of "being a bed hopping slut," (Howdy there, Kettle!) but then acting like she was a terrible parent and (and even thinking to himself "Who abandons their child?") when he was literally the one who did everything he could to avoid having to take care of his child. That's not abandonment, then? Calling Jasmine a liar and burning her letters instead of just making a paternity test potion?
But now that the Holly isn't dangerously dependent--now that she can feed herself and doesn't need nappies changed and is no longer at an age where she might get a childhood fever that turns into a seizure, now that she isn't waking her single parent up 10x a night and she can look after herself to some extent, NOW he wants to be a dad. Didn't want to be one when it was difficult, though.
Author's Response: Hello, thanks for the review. That's quite a comprehensive analysis of Snape's hypocrisy and I'm afraid to say more will come. So you'll have to put up with it a little longer before things settle
| Title: Grasp The Nettle
| 18 Oct 2021 7:21 pm
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Fantastic chapter! You are cleverly bringing the webs of the story together and the tension is rising to screaming pitch, thank you so much.
Hm, Severus is a Slytherin. Can he get over his undeserved Harry hate to see that HARRY is his key to his daughter? Be the one to give her back her brother and he will have made a huge stride in her eyes.
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