I like how you've written the growing relationship between Severus and Harry.
I like how you've written the growing relationship between Severus and Harry.
What a lovely village woman to take such good care of them. I was afraid they’d be found out when they didn’t stick to calling each other Samuel and Henry when all houses have ears. This was another terrific chapter. Thanks so much for updating!
Thanks for another captivating chapter. I loved the dialogue. And you’ve done it again with another cliffhanger ending that leaves me needing more!
Yes, you’re excellent at last lines! Your ability to draw readers into your story has me hooked.
This sequence was brilliant - especially the last line of the chapter. I’m so looking forward to reading on!
This is terrific! I’m so glad that Snape knows when to hold the snark.
This is great! I'm so looking forward to updates
Lol, I found this funny and clever:
"If Snape could still take the time to be a prat, things couldn’t be too awful."
Thank you for your kind comment on my investigatory skills in finding Chapter 1. :) Being called a beautiful human being made my day
| Title: Chapter 4
| 02 Jun 2023 11:39 am
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| Reviewer: Vee (Signed)
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AAh, great chapter break! Both your beginnings and endings to chapters are excellent. You know exactly how to draw us in. I love your dialogue and Harry's inner thoughts. Some stories tend to be too much in the protagonists head, but yours isn't. It's nice and pacey and you trust your reader enough not to explain everything - that's great writing!
I'm very much looking forward to more. Thanks for sharing your story!
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