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Reviews For The Curse
Great chapter!
Excellent chapter! Author's Response: Thank you!
Good chapter! Author's Response: Thank you, little voice!
Loved this chapter. Poor Snape. Why does he have to punish himself so much? I wonder if Harry will be affected in the future by the pain due to the curse.
I had to catch up with a couple of chapters. I think one reason why there might be fewer viewers is simply that I believe it’s a very busy time, and the email notification hasn’t worked, so people might have missed that you posted. (But it is fixed now.) Author's Response: Hi Spirit!
Great story! I'm hooked!! Author's Response: Grazie mille, vocina!
Your story is very intriguing, and somewhat unique: so it's very fun to see where it's going! Sometimes words or phrases aren't quite correct: I'm assuming this is because English isn't your native language, correct? I just read past it and understand what you meant, so it's not a bother. An example from this particular chapter would be using the pronoun "she" for Lucius as well as the potion Snape is taking (whereas we would use "he" and "it," respectively). Sometimes phrases you have Snape say seem more modern and casual than one would expect him to say in canon: but again, it's a style and doesn't have to be exactly like canon! There are some other times when small actions don't flow properly in the narrative: for example, in this chapter Snape was busy reading while Harry was writing lines, but the next time you describe Snape you say he was "still looking at Harry." So there's a jump in action from him reading (presumably papers or a book) to him "continuing" to look at Harry, though it was never described that he had begun to do so. I've noticed jumps like this in other chapters as well. AGAIN: I just fill in the blanks so no worries! I'm just giving feedback because you asked. Otherwise, as stated, it's an interesting and enjoyable story. :) Thank you! Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much! This feedback is really valuable and will help me improve a lot. These are very constructive and useful points. I’ll also ask my friends who check the translations to pay even closer attention. Thanks again for the review and your help!
Best wishes,
Author's Response: Hi Vocina, I think I’ve realized that reading habits can be quite different. Well, I’ll find out… I’ll get some help from Professor Trelawney’s inner eye. Thank you so much for reading my story; I’m really happy that you’re enjoying it. I completely understand how frustrating it can be to wait while a story unfolds, especially when you just want to know what happens next. I can only ask you to enjoy every step of this journey.
A big hug,
Author's Response: I absolutely adore your comments! I think, like me, you really enjoy the mix of intense and funny scenes. I love writing because it lets me explore all the absurd situations I can imagine. Thank you so much for all your feedback. Hugs, Lady
Author's Response: You know, I can’t really remember! Maybe there’s something similar coming up later on. But trust me — you won’t get bored. There’s so much still to discover. Hugs Lady
Author's Response: I absolutely adore Minerva! I use her all the time in my stories. She will have a beautiful evolution throughout the narrative. Hugs, Lady |
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