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Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: The Christmas Dance 10 Jul 2006 10:36 pm
Reviewer: Serena Snape (Signed) [Report This]
    While I like your story very much, I can't condone for copying another's work. The scene with Lily and Snape dancing was taken from another fanfiction. I can't remember the title at the moment, but it was about Harry being caught in the fire at the Dursleys and sent to Severus for protection by a goddess. Then he goes in the founder's dimension and comes back. There's a new student at Hogwarts. He changes his name to Sebastien Frostpine I think - and I know that the dance scene was taken from there. Harry and the other student danced together - they were learnt the Art of Dance by the Founders. He was a fire elemental and she a water elemental I think. Or was it the other way around.
Title: At Hogwarts? 06 Jul 2006 7:33 am
Reviewer: StormyLlewellyn (Signed) [Report This]

    Voldemort place (it should be "placed") a hand on his shoulder... There was a flash of red lights...

    You might want to consider getting a beta because you make several small mistakes in the writing which interrupt the flow of the story. These are basic things which should be taken care of before you ever publish your story. I like your premise and you are doing a good job of realizing it. One this, Snape seemed pretty ooc. And the name thing has been overdone, calling someone by their first name to begin a relationship.

Title: Untitled 25 Jun 2006 2:05 pm
Reviewer: Fairycatcher1 (Signed) [Report This]
    come on! write some more!!! please?
Title: Untitled 07 Mar 2006 3:23 am
Reviewer: Lena Slytherin (Anonymous) [Report This]
    LOVE IT! LOVE IT!  i hope there is so much more!!!! please the charaters are just way too perfect you are brilliant!
Title: Untitled 16 Feb 2006 3:48 am
Reviewer: berenene (Anonymous) [Report This]
    LOVE IT!!! YOU ROCK MY SOX!! man i wish i could write as good as you. :(
Title: Untitled 25 Jan 2006 2:32 am
Reviewer: Vanaondoiel (Anonymous) [Report This]

    All I can say is wow!   I love this story!   It is a great combo of going back in time and sev as a father!  Ithink that this is particularly well written, and you have done a good job trying not to make cthings too confusing :)

    Great work, update soon,


Title: Untitled 17 Jan 2006 10:35 pm
Reviewer: Kira (Anonymous) [Report This]

    aww how cute





Title: Midnight Visits 17 Jan 2006 8:02 am
Reviewer: Kira (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Slightly corny but i REALLY like corny stuff, not that your storys corny just that little bit of snape at the end oh and Harrys response to that.  then again it is midnight so ignore me
Title: Untitled 27 Nov 2005 12:50 pm
Reviewer: Jennifer (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I love this story so much! i hope you update soon!
Title: Untitled 26 Nov 2005 3:22 am
Reviewer: Oxygen (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Ohhh great story! update soon please! :)

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