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Title: Epilogue 05 Feb 2024 5:39 pm
Reviewer: LocustsAndFrogspawn (Signed) [Report This]


Title: Epilogue 24 May 2023 1:38 am
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    This was a very sweet story! Thanks for the lovely epilogue.
Title: Found (Part 2) 24 May 2023 1:29 am
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    This was absolutely heart melting.
Title: Found (Part 1) 24 May 2023 1:19 am
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    I hope that Lucius and Narcissa can be helpful. Thanks for another terrific chapter!
Title: Lost 22 May 2023 4:10 pm
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    This is so good! What a terrific first chapter. I like how kind young Draco is.
Title: Epilogue 23 Aug 2021 12:01 am
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    I love that you booted Fumbleduck to the curb!*o/*

    Good story!

    Thank you! Get a Beta and keep writing!
Title: Found (Part 2) 22 Aug 2021 11:36 pm
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    Well, you could definitely use a Beta for spelling and proofreading, but the *feeling* is there; the ability to build a scene and wring pathos and/or humor from it!

    You must either be a parent, have an excellent memory, or have dealt with children because your characterizations of Harry and Draco are spot on! And Draco is delightful!

    I was very impressed as well as surprised when you had Draco pick up his own toys and tidy up AND that he didn't ask for one thing for himself on his quest for the perfect "Welcome home" gift for Harry!

    I know that makes him very OOC or maybe this is the Draco that could have been at 7-years-old; I always pictured him as a magical version of Dudley (or James Potter!), but without the "overfeeding" syndrome of the Dursleys.

    I always felt that what Petunia and Vernon did to Dudley was another kind of child abuse: Overindulging, overfeeding, no boundaries, no consequences for behavior that later as an adult will see him in and out of prison and, in all probability, dead before he's 30. If not in a back alley fight with the wrong person then of a heart attack.

    In their twisted quest to show Harry just how much he's not wanted and despised they're raising a monster!

    There's kind of an ironic twist there: Dumbasfu** raised Harry as a sacrificial lamb and the Dursleys raised Dudley as a pig to slaughter.

    I'm really hoping that your "Epilogue" puts a nice big "F-U" stick in Dumbasfu**'s spokes!

Title: Found (Part 1) 22 Aug 2021 10:00 pm
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    Really well done! You've skillfully conveyed each of Harry's feelings beyond anything that Rowling wrote in canon!

    She wrote as a child would without depth or understanding of how a child, raised in such a poisonous environment and beaten down every moment that he could remember would actually act and react!

    Do *not* attempt to defend or legitimize her and her books to me!

    I'm 59 years old and have read classic Fantasy & Science Fiction my entire life! I also used to review Children's and Youth Fiction for my local library!

    The truly sad thing is that because children and adults under 30 were discouraged from reading and have nothing to measure this garbage against, they think Rowling is "wonderful"! Well, can truthfully say that it's some of the worst writing I've ever read!

    Your 2 chapters stand "head and shoulders" above hers on any scale you'd care to use!

    Funny but related digression: When I read the books in 2005, the American versions had beautiful covers, but I recently saw the original cover art for the UK versions. They look like they were drawn by a TEN-YEAR-OLD and not a very talented 10-year-old either!

    As that's the level of writing that I found when attempting to read them, I'm not terribly surprised!

    What did surprise me was the level of unattributed *plagiarism* that Bloomsbury either allowed or conspired to; I recognized characters, plotlines, and scenes from classic stories on a single read-through! What "she" wrote (or the ghostwriters at Bloomsbury) was a highly *pushed* and financial "golden goose" of a FANFICTION without attribution to the writers she *stole* from!

    Your writing is terrific and if you're not intimidated by the process, something that you should seriously think of pursuing!

    Really, really well done!
    Thank you!

    Author's Response: Hey, I know you sent this reply 2 years ago but I just wanted to say that I really appreciated everything you said. I saw this a lot closer to when you posted it and it always inspires me whenever I see it again. (Apologies for not replying then, I was 17 and overwhelmed that I was receiving any comments, let alone praise lol) But thank you, I appreciate it
Title: Epilogue 29 Jun 2021 2:22 am
Reviewer: maworth0612 (Signed) [Report This]
    very nice story.. batman indeed
Title: Epilogue 23 Dec 2020 11:55 pm
Reviewer: Gar (Signed) [Report This]
    I love this. Especially Draco & Harry's friendship and brotherhood as well as Severus grudging-at-first then absolute need to save Harry from the Dursley's horrendous treatment. Thanks for writing & sharing :)

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