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Reviews For Backwards
It would also be nice to see some brotherly interaction between all the boys. As of now, I don't feel like they interact all that much. They sort of seem like they go to their separate places during the day and play or get into mischief, and little kids don't quite do that. They tend to want to play with each other. I know Severus is younger than Sirius, but Sirius isn't old enough to think that playing with Severus is "lame"... I think Harry wouldn't be quite so strict all the time. His personality is a bit wooden. There isn't anything about his mannerisms or what he says that makes him unique or humorous or worried, etc. He just sort of goes through the motions. I would imagine if Harry is so happy that Severus is calling him "Daddy" that he would show affection towards Severus without being prompted by, say, Severus wanting to sit by him, etc. It would be nice (and realistic) to see Harry take the initiative and show fatherly affection to Sirius or Severus, or his own kids, even. The fact that he's hesitant to pick Severus up and even asks Severus "is that okay?" is kind of odd, considering he had no qualms about spanking him for doing something dangerous, which, in my opinion, shows that he cares about Severus very much. Again, give Harry some personality... relax the dialogue...think about how people *really* talk to each other. Give us something to connect to. Just a few suggestions to give the story more character. I think this is a good premise for a story, and the plot and characters have potential. Good luck! Author's Response: Thanks for your review. As for Harry, he definitely is having some issues right now. Mainly because he doesn't always know how to act with the two boys that were oncce adults in his life. No worried, he is getting there, and I will definitely take what you have said, especially with the dialogue, and go with it. Again, thanks for the review=)
Author's Response: Haha no worries, the next chapter will be up in a few days. Thanks for the review!
Great work :) I'm excited for a massive Christmas celebration and Pansy's story :) Author's Response: Thanks! I am glad that you enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Perhaps...hehe=)
I loved the shopping with Harry and Sev! So sweet! I really love little Alby too. Him and Sev are too cute! Author's Response: Thanks! =)
Author's Response: lol thanks! I know shopping during that time of year is hectic in general...but with a child...ha. They were, at least, smart enough to have one adult per child lol. The next chapter will be up as soon as I can get it written...or, rather, finished. Thanks for the review!
Author's Response: Let's just say that Sirius had a different train of thought....lol
great chap by the way! Author's Response: As Christmas is coming in this fic, I believe that that will be quite managable! Thanks for the review! |
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