I wouldn't mind reading a longer piece if you write one. (hint, hint) ;)
Nice little scene in the life of Harry. :) I thought that your characterization of harry was nice, and you managed to capture the hustle and bustle of the streets. You did have some puncuation mistakes and such, like saying Snape was at least 6 ft 4 ". That's REALLY tall. You needed to add a little bit more in the story, descriptions perhaps but not of the people, more like descriptions of everything going on.
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