See! HIs boy! I knew he loved Sevie!!!
This is actually very very good, and I do so hope you'll keep writing!!
>< I love this story so much!!
| Title: Proven Worth
| 27 Sep 2006 2:11 am
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| Reviewer: miiamya (Anonymous)
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i love this story. it is so well written and toucing. i cant wait to see what path their relationship takes. now that i said that...i have a few issues with your writing. ones is the lines around the thoughts. the reader can tell what is a thought espcially since you tend to write 'he thought'after the line. it is really unnessecary and not proper. another problem, the little stars around words are incredibly annoying. i assume they are there for emphasis but , if anything, they distract me from wht is going on in the story and i repeatedly find myself having to reread sentences because i was so thrown by the little stars. but this is such a wonderful story. really. lots of love, maya or uknowho
lol, Poor Sev. *shakes head* He really did get tossed into a tail spin, didn't he? *grin* lol, Excelent chap! NEXT!
hehe. very cute. :D waiting for more.
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