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Reviews For A Time and Place to Grow
I think that starting the entire story with Harry off to find a time-turner is kind of bizarre and it seemed a bit rushed, but that didn't bother me once i got more into the story, since i'm so curious about how Snape's going to continue trying to care for Harry. Mentor/guardianships are my fav stories anyways, and you've got an interesting approach to it. Keep writing! I'm waiting to see what happens next. :-)
I absolutely enjoyed this chapter. Especially when Severus imagines what Albus would be saying, like " Precious Harry, suggested schedule ..." They are both very much in character. Can't wait to see Harry's reaction to his schedule. There is actually a lot of free time for Harry, only 2 hours of studying. It could be worse. He doesn't even has to do any chores. I bet Harry will not realise how much freedom he actually has because it's organised and he will probably hate getting up early in the holidays and going to bed early. I hope Harry comes to see how much Snape cares, because I feel sorry for Snape always helping so much even if it's done with a lot sarcasm and Harry just being plain rude and calling him names. It is good that you consider some other punishments other than spanking. Maybe washing Harry's mouth out with soap for foul, respectless language. Please update soon!
Cool! I like your Severus a lot, he's not the typical "I hated Potter all my life and now I love him after a couple of days" that many fics have. Still waiting for the essay, must be fun. More banter (was hilarious), more mischief and more punishments please! Can´t wait for the next update
Oh, this is a wonderful story! I particularly enjoy the pace you're setting, not rushing through every event, but never letting the plot line stagnate either. I also like that Snape is not immediantly won over by Harry and still views him as a pest, but is doing all he can to help him anyway. I am hoping, however, that Snape will eventually come to care for the little brat? Switching between viewpoints is also very effective and far more interesting than limiting the story to only Harry's view, which is necessarily skewed. Hearing Snape's take on events is always illuminating! Plus, you manage it without any awkwardness in transition, which is hard to accomplish. The only real, minor problems that I have found are grammer and spelling mistakes, which are easy to fix. I'm curious to see how Harry is going to react to Snape's schedule. I somehow can't see him accepting something so stringent very easily. Snape definitely has his work cut out for him! I am glad to see, however, that Snape is giving all of his actions so much consideration, it seems very in character for him to be so meticulous. The confrontation promises to be... interesting. At the very least. In short, I am throughly enjoying your work and I hope you continue. I can't wait until the next update! - Ari On a side note, if you are looking for a beta for the aforementioned grammer problems, I would really be quite happy to volunteer! If so, feel free to contact me at arianaaulor@hotmail.com . If not, I'll just keep waiting for the next installment!
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