| Title: Chapter 17 - Starting Over
| 25 Jul 2006 9:39 am
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| Reviewer: shirusee (Signed)
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I like your story. I feel thar Snape may be a bit to hard on harry sometimes but it goes with the way you portray him. The spanking may be usefull for the story but are the use of object to do the spanking really necessary?
I do have a sugestion; you should get somebody to read it after you write because in some places there are words missing (for example a be missing from a i'll be). They are pretty obvious to spot even for a francophone like me and they hurt the flow of the story since I have to stop to see what the word missing should be. With mistakes like these the person who wrote the text often doesn't not see them.