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Title: Chapter 23 - Two Boys 27 Nov 2006 10:36 pm
Reviewer: Saphire Starlet (Anonymous) [Report This]

    Great chapter, i loved the interactions and how Snape seemed so baffled about Harry's concern over Draco getting more attention than him!

    Please update soon as you can!

Title: Chapter 23 - Two Boys 27 Nov 2006 10:05 pm
Reviewer: nemo (Anonymous) [Report This]
    aw this is a great chapter...
Title: Chapter 23 - Two Boys 27 Nov 2006 9:34 pm
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    Very nice chapter.  You pulled a lot of things together here.  It was nice to see some of Snape's  thinking in this chapter and for Harry to get some verbal confirmation from Snape that he is viewing him as family.  Now it will be nice to see you work on Harry and Draco's relationship.
Title: Chapter 23 - Two Boys 27 Nov 2006 4:55 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]

    Fantastic. I had several favourite lines but here's just one of them: Snape was neither a woman nor soft-hearted, and he said, "No more slamming doors." Great. I loved how Snape talked through everything with Harry. The silver ground snitch was a great idea - I wonder if Harry and Draco will compete with each other over it. I really liked how Snape told Draco that the yellow cup was Harry's and to take another one. I found Draco to be very in character this chapter. Opening the subject of abuse from Harry to Draco was unexpected but I think it was needed. It added a touch of realism and I hope that maybe Draco will study, or notice the way Snape and Harry act around each other. Poor Harry, Draco heard them... he doesn't seem to be too mortified though, he was able to fake it and threaten Malfoy back. :) Great chapter, thanks for writing and posting!

    About what another reviewr said: I don't know, I'm a lot older than 16 and I still feel special over cookies and what-not. :)

Title: Chapter 23 - Two Boys 27 Nov 2006 4:43 am
Reviewer: SiriuslyMental (Signed) [Report This]
    Yes! An Update! You've no idea how much I am enjoying this story right now! It's really briliant, and I can't wait to find out what happens next!
    ((Oh, and try downloading firefox. I was having problems with certain pages on my computer that worked before, and they're fine on firefox.))
Title: Chapter 23 - Two Boys 27 Nov 2006 4:07 am
Reviewer: azamystic (Anonymous) [Report This]

    "And I've seen him hit you with his cane once or twice just because you said something he didn't quite like."

    Silence from the other bed.

    Harry glanced over there. Draco was still sitting up, but his lips were pressed together so hard they were almost white.

    "Does he hit you?" Harry asked bluntly.

    Still no answer. Draco was staring ahead, his eyes wide and intense. Harry propped himself up on one elbow to better see the blond-haired boy.

    "Does he hit you? Does he beat you? With his cane?"

    Draco looked at Harry, and Harry drew in a sharp breath.

    "Draco," Harry searched for words to fit the horror of the moment, "Draco . . . no. Just . . . no."

    I can't imagine anything more awful. Poor Draco. The way you portrayed that scene was very good, thanks for handeling it that way. Now I'm not sure whether Snape should spank him or not, but I guess if you made the difference clear, it would be ok. Thanks for posting, I loved this chapter! 

     

Title: Chapter 23 - Two Boys 27 Nov 2006 2:23 am
Reviewer: Moose (Anonymous) [Report This]
    It's getting better.  I like it, but it still feels like it should happen before Hogwarts started, when Harry is about 10.  It just doesn't fit 16.  At sixteen I had my learners license, I had travelled alone to Europe, I lived in my own place, and I certainly was independent emotionally.  Harry acts more like my boyfriend's eight year old... which is fine.  But I thought I'd let you know, in my head, your story is in a time limbo, a lot earlier, yet with obviously some events (like Lucius) having happened.  At sixteen, no body gives a codswallop for biscuits.  Not even harry. not after so many years of feasts at school, and money to buy chocolate frogs all he likes. anyway, I shall just continue in my time warp... :) keep writing!
Title: Chapter 23 - Two Boys 27 Nov 2006 12:21 am
Reviewer: Carrie (Anonymous) [Report This]

    Awesome Chapter!  I really liked how you had Snape talk to Harry and how they worked things out.  Seems like Snape is actually trying to be fair!  Imagine that!  Still waiting for him to smack Draco, but hey, that's me!

     I hope Harry and Draco can get along somewhat! 

     More soon!

Title: Chapter 23 - Two Boys 26 Nov 2006 10:50 pm
Reviewer: Alissa (Anonymous) [Report This]
    That was a great chapter.  That totally made up for Severus being a jerk in the previous chapter.  I love the fact that he thinks of Harry like a son, and even though he got punished for the door slamming he talked to him beforehand and really listened to what Harry had to say about Draco.  It was nice to see him sticking up for him and leaving the snitch in his pocket, very cute.  I just hope that Draco and Harry can come to some sort of understanding, not asking for them to be best friends or anything because that would be weird but maybe if they just didn't hate each other as much it would help.  wonderful chapter keep up the great work and update soon. 
Title: Chapter 23 - Two Boys 26 Nov 2006 10:13 pm
Reviewer: Amaruk Wolfheart (Anonymous) [Report This]
    YAAAAAAAAYY!!! ^_^ Love it! Snape's conversation (slash lecture...) with Harry was prolly my favorite part. I love how you write them! Can't wait to see how things progress between Harry & Draco.

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