OMG!!! I belive I was embarrassed for Harry when he got spanked in front of Neville. I felt as if I was standing there while he was getting spanked. 

Harry should be in Hufflepuff as much as he cries. I thought he was going through a phase of grievance and everything was bottled up and needed to be released but c'mon Harry get a grip on yourself. 

I was hoping to see a bond forming between Harry and Snape by now. But they keeping running around in circles. I was really hoping that Snape would have acknowledged Harry's mistreatment at the Dursley but he disregarded the whole thing as if it was nothing. I'm looking forward to them bonding... really bonding and seeing each other as they are meant to be seen. 

Harry seems to be way out of character... he id behaving oddly ungratful, arrogant and Malfoyish. Did you intend him to be OOC or does it have something to do with his fever that Snape is concerned about? I hope I'm not coming of as critiquing your work, I'm just trying to understand his behavior. I love your work, very nicely written.  

I'm liking this story and how it's written. I love the little bit of humor in the beginning of the second last paragraph. I hope to see a lot more of this humor in the rest of the story. Indeed very well written. Thank you for writing.