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Reviews For Harry Potter and the Cavern of Crystals
Author's Response: Wow, I thank you for reviewing each chapter as you went. I like it when people give me their thoughts on each particular chapter and I have encountered reviewers who will only review the last chapter even if there are many when they first stumble upon the story. So thank you for taking the time to give me your thoughts on each chapter. Thank you for the honest, constructful review. I appreciate it. I just read the first six chapters (I have two more that I'm still tweaking and therefore have yet to be posted) and I am reworking the first ones a bit because I am unhappy with the flow. Again, thank you for the reviews.
:) Great chapter. I am so happy that Snape and Draco were there to help Harry. Poor kid. "I know of the Horcruxes, Harry," Snape stated bluntly. "I wish to help you find the rest to destroy Voldemort." AWESOME line. hehe, I loved it. Also, Snape replied hotly, disturbed by the extent of the injuries he’d found. You really conveyed that nicely there. As for things that could be improved on, I think that you have a really nicely plotted story and that it moves along very well. However, I think that you have a couple of gaps or strange order of action, things that the characters do. It's not really that bad, I had to think deeply about what exactly it was that I was noticing, but it is detracting from your story a little. Usually hurt and comfort scenes are exploited to their fullest without going overboard. For those who love h/c (hurt/comfort) the other parts of the story can be choppy and they won't care as long as the h/c part is done well. The writing was not quite fluid in this chapter to carry the h/c part. It's nothing really important but maybe just having an awareness will help. :) This made Harry pause;he
Yay! Snape saved him. I really enjoyed this chpater. Keep it up!
Poor Harry! I hope Snape will help him get out. Keep up the good work. Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
Author's Response: He has not come of age nor has he passed his apparition test. Thanks for the review.
I like this story a lot so far! It will be interesting to see where your headed with it. Keep up the good work! Kyliopa Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. |
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