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Reviews For For Duty and Honor
Author's Response: I will, I promise. Not right away, but I didn't mean to take a hiatus...
My only quibble is that I think Snape would speak more formally in places, such as at the Dursley's when he is speaking to Petunia. In here he says "me and your sister" where as I think he would use proper English and say "your sister and I". Author's Response: Thank you! :) I love AYLNO, but my main complaint is that it seems a bit incomplete and the transition a bit forced without Severus's POV. It's why I chose to use both Harry's and Severus's viewpoints when this particular plot jumped out and bit me in the butt. Your words are something for me to consider. :) Thanks for the constructive criticism.
Author's Response: LOL! My beta reader took chapters with her this weekend, so hopefully I should be able to update soon. I'm very glad you're enjoying it!
And I just have to say, you've got the characterisation down great (and it took some effort there to not write "right shiny". dang habits!), which is something I've always had such trouble with when it comes to HP fic... Keep up the good work! ---Spike Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Author's Response: I'm waiting to get it back from my beta reader.
Awsome I can not wait for you to update again. You have a great writing style and the entire story just plain rocks!!! Thanks for writing!! Skittles to you! Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like my story, Solitare! :)
Author's Response: My beta reader has it. She's had it for a few weeks. *shrug*
HI there great storry, cant wait til you update. But i have a question did you learn latin! ( because of the headline) shouldn't it be packta sevanda sunt, i mean i do NOT want to critisice you but i'm just interested, because i had to learn it for 7 years and now im just worriing, that i did not understand anything, so it is probably yours that is correct ,but could you explain it to me? Just so all the latin was not in vain and please dont be angry i mean listen to my english and you can see that i'm not one to mock someone becaus of language and such So fantastic story , keep it up miracle Author's Response: Actually, I have a retired Latin teacher doing my translations, so I can assure you that they are correct.
Author's Response: I don't have one, actually. Your best bet is to get an account here or at fanfiction.net and add me to favorites here or story alerts there. :) I'm glad you like my story.
ooh, this is lovely! Snape's change of character is very slow and natural. you are doing a great job with the progression. i am very curious about the visit to st. mungo's. keep up the great work, i can't wait to read more! ~violet Author's Response: Thank you! In my opinion, most stories force the change a bit too much, so I tried not to. I'm waiting on my beta reader before I can update again. |
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