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Reviews For For Duty and Honor
Hi, I've enjoyed reading your story very much. Thank you for sharing it. Poor Snape is fighting himself and his feelings the poor guy. As is Harry though Harry has had mistrust beat into him. I think Snape will come around before Harry does fully .... maybe :) Again, thanks. I really hope this isn't the end and you'll be willing to add more to it. Author's Response: It isn't, but both my beta reader and myself have been heavily hit by RL. I've just moved to a new home, and my computer isn't even unpacked yet. I currently don't even have access to my files. :) And yeah, it'll take quite some time for Harry to learn to trust Severus. I try and bring an element of reality to my stories, and the reality is that abused kids like Harry have a hard time trusting people. He'll learn, but it will just take time. In fact he might not have learned to completely trust him in this story at all. I have far reaching plans that might entail continuing in sequels through at least sixth year, and maybe even seventh. I'm not quite sure if it'll go that far yet.
Just wanted to say I still love this fic, and am still dying to know more. I wish that you could still continue on the same website, but I'm thankful that I at least get to read more of the story. Please update soon!!! :D Author's Response: Schnoogle has not been kind to me. I was already posting here as well, so I simply moved everything over here. I promise to update fairly soon, well, as soon as my beta reader finds some time and we get unpacked enough to set my computer up.
Author's Response: I will, I promise. Not right away, but I didn't mean to take a hiatus...
My only quibble is that I think Snape would speak more formally in places, such as at the Dursley's when he is speaking to Petunia. In here he says "me and your sister" where as I think he would use proper English and say "your sister and I". Author's Response: Thank you! :) I love AYLNO, but my main complaint is that it seems a bit incomplete and the transition a bit forced without Severus's POV. It's why I chose to use both Harry's and Severus's viewpoints when this particular plot jumped out and bit me in the butt. Your words are something for me to consider. :) Thanks for the constructive criticism.
Other then that, I haven't found any problems so far - the characters are mostly who they should be. Author's Response: Depends on the definition you're using, hon. There are eight different definitions for the word, "volatile" in the dictionary, and only one is low boiling point. Volatile also means explosive, changeable, mercurial... As a noun (which I believe is how I used it) it can mean a gas or solvent that is explosive. Admin Edit: volatile - tending or threatening to break out into open violence; explosive: www.dictionary.com
Author's Response: LOL! My beta reader took chapters with her this weekend, so hopefully I should be able to update soon. I'm very glad you're enjoying it!
And I just have to say, you've got the characterisation down great (and it took some effort there to not write "right shiny". dang habits!), which is something I've always had such trouble with when it comes to HP fic... Keep up the good work! ---Spike Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Author's Response: I'm waiting to get it back from my beta reader.
Awsome I can not wait for you to update again. You have a great writing style and the entire story just plain rocks!!! Thanks for writing!! Skittles to you! Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like my story, Solitare! :)
Author's Response: My beta reader has it. She's had it for a few weeks. *shrug* |
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