Potions and Snitches
Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Reviews For Define Family
Title: The Werewolf 31 Jul 2006 3:40 pm
Reviewer: im2crazy (Signed) [Report This]

    yay! what a great story! update soon

     

Title: The Werewolf 31 Jul 2006 3:40 pm
Reviewer: im2crazy (Signed) [Report This]

    yay! what a great story! update soon

     

Title: The Werewolf 17 Jul 2006 4:43 am
Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Hmmmmm.  A happy Harry.  What ever made you think of such a radical idea???
Title: The Werewolf 04 Jul 2006 7:53 am
Reviewer: Shelly-Belly (Anonymous) [Report This]

    this is coooooollll!!!! I really really like this fic but as to your question at the start of this chapter I think it is to soon for Harry to go to Hogwarts. unless you mean him just visiting then thats ok. But Severus' and Harry's relationship does seem to be going really fast.

    Umm.... please dont take this the wrong way but did you take part of the last chapter from Spiorad on fanfiction.net? It just seems so alike and i dont think people would appreshiat it if you were. er.. Spiorad story is called Back To Being a Baby and the last chapter of your fic is REALLY similar to the chapter in her's called He cant cook (or cwook, I cant remember how she spelled it.) you just might put a note saying that you did get it from her if you did.

Title: Helping 11 Apr 2006 7:14 am
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) [Report This]

    And the plot thickens as Lucius enters. We're scared now.

    Keep up the good work.

Title: Attempts at Comfort 11 Apr 2006 7:11 am
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) [Report This]

    Great start. I have not read the whole story, but I'm looking forward to taking it in a little at a time.

Title: The Werewolf 10 Apr 2006 4:13 pm
Reviewer: Moongrl (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Nah the relationship isn't rushed considering the past relationship standards Harry had with his relatives, it would be natural for him to either cling to a person who is kind to him or to freak out around everyone, i personally liek the option you took. I really like this story so keep up the good work! :D
Title: The Werewolf 07 Apr 2006 4:47 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Yeah... you are rushing. Harry calling Snape Daddy works and is charming, but you are rushing with Harry and Remus and Remus and Snape especially. It rather seems OOC to me. You are shifting away from the purpose of the archive with this chapter. Remember that the main purpose has to be Snape and Harry Gen. I changed your rating to be G-T/.
Title: Helping 07 Apr 2006 4:43 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]

    Nice chapter! :) Harry is adorable as usual. I loved how Snape made thepotion, but Harry ruined it and then Snape was mad, but wasn't really. Poor Harry. he seems to be adjusting rather well though. Lucius is rather a surprise.

    Typos: "I was trying to help, he cried,

    Here you have a paragraph repeated: How unlike him, thought Severus as his friend did the complicated spell. A new door appeared in the hallway and Lucius gave an overly grand gesture to show him the room. It was decorated in greens and silvers, which was certainly like Lucius even at this age, and was already furnished with the bare essentials.

    thought Severus as his friend did the complicated spell.

Title: Helping 07 Apr 2006 12:08 am
Reviewer: star (Anonymous) [Report This]
    hey i really like your story very creative. have you read spiorads at fanfiction.net its called back to being a baby there seemes to be a few things that sound the same. dont take this the wrong way but some people might think you plagerized sence she published it way before you. if i were you i would change it a little or if you got the ideas from her contact her and ask her if you can use them or just give her credit or something.

    Author's Response: I assure you that he won't be staying little for long, I have never read that story and any similarities are completely coincidental.

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