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Reviews For Define Family
yay! what a great story! update soon
yay! what a great story! update soon
this is coooooollll!!!! I really really like this fic but as to your question at the start of this chapter I think it is to soon for Harry to go to Hogwarts. unless you mean him just visiting then thats ok. But Severus' and Harry's relationship does seem to be going really fast. Umm.... please dont take this the wrong way but did you take part of the last chapter from Spiorad on fanfiction.net? It just seems so alike and i dont think people would appreshiat it if you were. er.. Spiorad story is called Back To Being a Baby and the last chapter of your fic is REALLY similar to the chapter in her's called He cant cook (or cwook, I cant remember how she spelled it.) you just might put a note saying that you did get it from her if you did.
And the plot thickens as Lucius enters. We're scared now. Keep up the good work.
Great start. I have not read the whole story, but I'm looking forward to taking it in a little at a time.
Nice chapter! :) Harry is adorable as usual. I loved how Snape made thepotion, but Harry ruined it and then Snape was mad, but wasn't really. Poor Harry. he seems to be adjusting rather well though. Lucius is rather a surprise. Typos: "I was trying to help, he cried, Here you have a paragraph repeated: How unlike him, thought Severus as his friend did the complicated spell. A new door appeared in the hallway and Lucius gave an overly grand gesture to show him the room. It was decorated in greens and silvers, which was certainly like Lucius even at this age, and was already furnished with the bare essentials. thought Severus as his friend did the complicated spell.
Author's Response: I assure you that he won't be staying little for long, I have never read that story and any similarities are completely coincidental. |
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