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Title: Chapter Twenty-Two: Happy 29 Jan 2006 11:03 pm
Reviewer: Hollyowl (Signed) [Report This]
    its a good story but it would be better if your chapters showed up, ch. 19 on dont show up
Title: Chapter Nine: Discovery 28 Jan 2006 6:43 pm
Reviewer: Laume (Anonymous) [Report This]
    did you just accuse jk rowling of being a deceased dark wizard?
Title: Chapter Eighteen: Pledges 26 Dec 2005 9:42 pm
Reviewer: Broken wings (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I like your story a lot, but I can't, after the site's change, see chapter nineteen to thirtythree.
Title: Chapter Twenty-Seven: Overdose 10 Nov 2005 11:32 pm
Reviewer: Kathryn (Anonymous) [Report This]

    You know, this is just like a really bad car wreck.  YOu know you shouldn't look -- but can't help checking it out.  

    And making Draco into a semi-goodguy is just icing on this cake!!  If you only had a  Mary Sue, but then in someways, I guess anyone in this story could be considered that.

Title: Chapter Twenty-Two: Happy 09 Nov 2005 10:23 pm
Reviewer: Nancy (Anonymous) [Report This]
    You know, the thing is this is pretty well written: decent grammar, use of english and puncuation.  It would really be a good work of fiction if the storyline and the "traitor" issue weren't so outlandish.  It just isn't possible to believe this many people in one universe would be so densely stupid.
Title: Chapter Nineteen: Trustworthiness 09 Nov 2005 9:45 pm
Reviewer: Nancy (Anonymous) [Report This]

    WOW, are these people acting stupidly.  Harry was never this dense in the books -- especially when it comes to reading the newspapers and believing them. 

     I can't wait to see what happens next, you've got things so OOC, I can 't predict anything.

Title: Chapter Thirteen: Consequences 04 Nov 2005 8:06 pm
Reviewer: Nancy (Anonymous) [Report This]

    This was hysterical : "A/N- in case you’ve forgotten, the dementors have NOT left Azkaban yet. I am just saying that they conveniently didn’t see the Death Eaters escaping, if you don’t like it, tough, after all: my story, my rules."   I'll translate -- my characterization is totally off of canon and my plot has inconsistancies the size of Texas... and I don't care!!

    Thanks for the great chuckle.

Title: Chapter Nine: Discovery 04 Nov 2005 4:27 pm
Reviewer: Nancy (Anonymous) [Report This]
    You can't POSSIBLY expect any reader to think Lupin is a traitor?  Gimme a break, that makes no sense at all.  Not to mention, Ron grew past this type of stupidity in OoTP, he would NEVER think Harry was dark.  Are you trying to set something up?  Or do you really think readers are that gullible?
Title: Chapter Thirty-Two: Descent 01 Oct 2005 8:31 pm
Reviewer: zafaran@f...fm (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Oy vay. You are getting twisted, and it's getting to the point you need a scorecard to keep track of the characters. I've just finished rereading this from the beginning and then going into the new chapters I hadn't seen. This story is morbidly fascinating. It's also frustratingly disjointed in spots, but I'm not sure if it's a writing flaw or a deliberately chosen stylistic choice. I hope your schedule and muse will allow you to write and update with new chapters sometime soon. Keep up t..astmail.fm
Title: Chapter Thirty-Two: Descent 19 Aug 2005 7:08 am
Reviewer: Jared (Anonymous) [Report This]
    ummm you do know that this ISNT how the Fideleus works in canon right?

    Author's Response: hmm...I acknowldge your opinion, but disagree. If you want to know why, check my livejournal.

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