I love that they were doing meditation to center themselves before defense practice.
| Title: Chapter 4: First Sight
| 15 Oct 2008 12:58 am
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| Reviewer: Livi (Anonymous)
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Well, your story shows promise- it really does. But your grammar needs some serious work. I understand that proper grammar does not come naturally for most people, but finding a basic grammar editor is necessary if you want to be taken seriously as a writer. Hemingway once said that his editor was the one who really made him great, and if he was willing to ask for help, so should you be.
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