| Title: The Confusion
| 04 Nov 2007 5:02 am
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| Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous)
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I don't know how I missed so many updates as this is a very interesting story! Yes, this chapter was confusing just as the last chapters weren't so clear either. You have given Snape more 'life' than JK, so it's very interesting. How Trimbol was when he returned home was an eye-openerl. Seeing someone besides Slytherins disparage muggleborns was enlightening. It's easy to forget that there must be other people occupying the wizarding world. I was a bit dissapointed in how easily Trimbol slipped into that framework. As for Severus, he is showing a level of care that while obviously painful (holding hands, hugging, tickling, etc.), is realistic and strangely appropriate for a loner who suddenly has family. I agree with you (and Snape) when he thinks about how he has not given Silas enough consideration considering how long he was with the Dursley's. How much of Harry's repressed emotions fuel the ghosts? Isn't it funny that James, one of the few that Harry did not see die in person, and his real mother are the ones that are hanging around? How will you explain Harry's lapses? Is there any chance that he is being taken over by Voldy??? That would explain a lot--how many young wizards would call up a Chimera? I felt bad a few chappies back when Snape gave Silas a hard time over his need for physical affection and comfort and was surprised that you took 2 (?) chapters for him to consider that he has the duel role of brother/father. Let me tell you, even biological parents despair over whether they are making the right choices, decisions, etc. But you obviously know that due to the way you gently inserted it into Snape's inner monologue. Can you tell I went to some teacher workshops today and we talked about writing??? Sorry classes are so tough. I'm also glad you recognize that as much as you enjoy writing, that those classes, which probably cost a years pay when you put in books/room/board/etc., are more important right now!!! I'm just glad you are not going to abandon the boys! Their lives are extremely interesting!!!
Good chapter. I enjoyed the mystery going on with between the brothers. And Snape's wishing that he didn't have to be a parent was quite believable, even as he realizes that he has to be more father than brother.
Good Chapter! I can't wait to see what you've got planned for the rest of the story. Are the dreams that Harry's having with Lilly, James, and Voldermort or are you creating a new plot line with different dreams. Either way, it'll be interesting.
I wonder what's going to happen with the ghost-James... I hope that you explain why he's there, what he is (as he is no ordinary ghost), and what it all means.
I'm also really glad that Silas and Severus are getting along so well. It's sweet how Severus protects and cares for him in his own way...like just feeling like he needs to check up on Silas...even though he dosen't really admit it to himself.
I hope you also explain the reference to Silas in the play, unless it was a reference to Harry Potter? I really don't know, but am waiting expectantly for the next chapter! Write, write, write!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! The reference in the play was actually that they mentioned "Professor Snape's little brother", and Silas doesn't like attention. Thanks for pointing that out, I'll have to make it more clear when I go back over the chapter. Ghost James will be coming up . . . along with explanations. These chapters have been laying down information for the big events that take place over his 7 years of school, so everything will be explained. I glad you like it so far! I'll get up a chapter as soon as I can.
Excellent chapter! I think you've done a great job showing Silas's confusion over the whole blood issue. I'm sure he'll still have trouble understanding why Severus has to act as if he despises muggleborns...especially when he forbid Silas to say "mudblood". Let's hope he doesn't slip up...I can only imagine his brother's wrath...lol. Anyway, I'm really enjoying this story because it's so original and interesting. Keep it up!
Thank you for the update. It's good to see that Severus is going to teach his brother, not to be nasty when it comes to muggleborns. Pure blood wizards sure are hung up on money and well pureblood, aren't they. Keep up the great work and please update again soon. LES
An interesting twist on the relationship between Harry and Snape. I really appreciate the way you've managed to show Snape softening towards Harry (or Silas, rather) while still staying true to his character, and allowing the change to proceed gradually.
| Title: The New
| 04 Jul 2007 7:19 am
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| Reviewer: Leanne (Anonymous)
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You have kept Snape in character without immediately changing his personality which i find makes the story that much more enjoyable.I am looking forward to the next chapter.
Wonderful chapter! I like Severus worrying about Ha- Silas's sleepwalking and about Sirius taking him away. It's adorable!
I may be wrong in this... but this part --"Silas has been asking several times a day . . . there has been problems lately.-- Shouldn't 'has' be 'have'? since problems is plural?
Author's Response: I think you're right, actually. I need to go over this chapter again anyway soon. Thanks for the review!
Excellent chapter! I really enjoyed the part where Draco and Silas were playing in the mud. Actually, I love how you've characterized both boys, and I enjoy reading about their adventures ;) Just wanted to let you know how much I enjoy your story!
~Jade
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