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Reviews For Change Happens
You have such an original story line that I hate to see it spoiled with mistakes. Quickly, I noticed these: "Will think of something, so don't you worry." This should be "We'll think of something. "Your turning into a cat, Potter." You have several instances like this line where you use "your" instead of "you're". It should be "You're turning into a cat." Author's Response: Thank you sunsethill, I've seen to the problems you wrote me off.
I like your story, I am definitely going to keep on following it. Interesting new creature, something I like so it will be fun to see where you go with it. Thanks! Oh one thing - you constantly confuse these two things - they are and shortened they're, and their as in possesion, you do this with you as well - you're and your - it would make the fic better if you'd look at it :D Author's Response: Thank you Ash, I will see about fixing those things.
Author's Response: Severus fought over Potter, because he hates it when someone tries to take something away. Even if it's someone's attention. You'll just have to see and Voldy, I'll get him in the story soon.
Watch your grammar, other then that this is a really great fic! This chapter was nice, I hope you go into more detail and angst with Harry and the "abused" aspect of things. I'm not sure how your going to work with Harry turning into a cat but it will be interesting to see what you do. I HOPE YOU FEEL BETTER!!!! Author's Response: Thank you Spiorad, I went back and looked over my grammar, currecting it to the best of my abilities. I'll try to get more detail with the abuse in to. |
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