Fyuh, Snape has to cook by himself? Hilarious :)
Um, 3 inches of parchment? Are you sure? I think you meant 3 feet. 3 inches is like, 3 lines?
Somehow I wanted to see them arguing in the room. Other than that and the grammar mistakes it was good. Also, three inches of parchment is not very much... maybe a written paragraph by our standards... hardly an essay.
I think it's the start to a good story, but when you write you sometimes write in present tense, and sometimes in past tense. It gets a bit annoying.
Aww that was a cute ending, though I wish Severus would have revealed more about himself.
Ah, well that was really smart of him! And it's funny how neither of them realized that little fact.
Well, at least Severus prevented Harry from drowning and Harry told Severus a bit about his early years so there's a good start. Will Severus tell Harry anything about his childhood?
This is a good start to this story. I like how you have both Snape and Harry trying to open the door only to fail and be told by Dumbledore that it cannot be done. However I noticed a fair amount of errors in your tenses, you tend to shift from past to present tense in some of your paragraphs and it's a little awkward.
Great ending - but do you realise how long 3 inches is? (:
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