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Reviews For Under Lock and Key
Title: Tricked! 24 Jul 2006 2:28 am
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    Nice beginning.  I will enjoy this, but would really appreciate it if you would keep all your sentences in the same tense.  Several have the present tense just appear and it is very disconcerting.  Another pet peeve is the "relishing in" phrase.  I believe the word "in" is not necessary in that sentence.

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