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Reviews For Child's Play
Title: Big Trouble 24 Feb 2007 7:32 pm
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed) [Report This]
    Awww. Sweetness! There is so much familiarity here in dealing with small children - you can always see that moment when they go from pouting and whining to being geniunely upset. You've captured baby-behaviour very well.

    -K
Title: Trials and Tribulations: The Match 24 Feb 2007 7:14 pm
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed) [Report This]
    I think Lucius hitting Draco isn't out of the realm of possibility. I think, however, that Lucius could probably hurt Draco more with a look or a well-placed comment than his fist. He just seems like that kind of guy.

    -K
Title: Prophecies: The Morning of the Quidditch 18 Feb 2007 3:52 am
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed) [Report This]
    Draco IS fun to work with. He and Snape are what makes writing HP Fanfiction worthwhile, because they are devilishly complicated. You can make them behave well or badly, so long as you keep them speaking in the same "voice", which always opens up worlds of possibilities.

    They also both tend to tell the truth when other characters would tactfully keep their mouths shut, which likewise makes them ever so much fun to play with!

    -K
Title: The Naughty Stool 18 Feb 2007 3:41 am
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed) [Report This]
    The 'naughty stool' is hilarious and quite right. I wonder if you are a parent or have read some books on parenting? Hmm.

    -K
Title: The Catalyst 17 Feb 2007 8:49 pm
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed) [Report This]
    Reeeally good. Up until this point, the story has been more or less similar to many other de-ageing stories I've seen. But now...

    First you've got the weird new magical creature. A seahorse in a waistcoat! Heh. Nice image, and I nearly spat out my soda when he spoke to Ron. (Some might say too much, but not me. Startling, yes... too much, not really.)

    Snape's sudden decision to do something about the Pickle family was also good and also quite unexpected. Good on him for trying something dangerous on behalf of a family he didn't even know very well...

    Finally, you have found a rare reader in me, because I'm honestly not all that concerned with Harry at this point. I'm much more interested in what is going on with Severus and Lucius and the general nature of the spell rather than on how Severus and Harry will become closer - because the latter is more or less a given. I could write that part *for* you, and so could anyone else who's read one or two of these. What's most interesting are the new elements you've introduced and how you handle *them*.

    Again, just my two knuts, as they say. ;) You've got me v. intrigued.

    -K
Title: Grimmauld Place 17 Feb 2007 8:18 pm
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed) [Report This]
    Sirius was good! He was very much in character. I like the fact that you made the captured children from the Pickles family... the plot thickens.

    Harry is going to be an interesting kid, being 'raised' with the help of so many different people - Hermione, Snape, Sirius, Draco and Dumbledore seem to all have significant roles in his life at this point.

    -K
Title: A Walk in the Park 17 Feb 2007 7:54 pm
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed) [Report This]
    This is getting really good! I have to say a couple of things though... I am pretty certain it's Farmer in the Dell that's the old song kindergardeners sing. Also, if you're italicizing thoughts, it's odd to have them say "That was just what he needed" the way that Draco does awhile back... unless Draco is in the habit of thinking of himself in the third person. Usually that would be "That's just what I need". If you want to keep it as "that was just what he needed" you wouldn't italicize it.

    Nitpicky, I know...

    I love that they run into Sirius, and that Snape is apparently only able to accept baby-advice from people he doesn't already know. It's a very common sort of attitude, being too embarrassed or prideful to listen to advice from those you know well, but perfectly willing to heed the advice of a stranger.

    Harry's baby-mannerisms are all picture-perfect, really. He is just like a willful toddler (is there any other kind?).

    Harry's brief moment of realization was really quite well done. I felt sorry for him that most of it slipped rather immediately away.

    Good show so far! :)

    -K

    Author's Response: It's definitely the Farmers in his Den where I come from (thus speaks several years of playground school games) - I'm sure there are a few versions on the go though. I don't know about the thoughts. To me 'that was just what he needed' seems right? The narrator is king of narrating his thoughts??? But maybe you're right? Anyway thanks for the review
Title: Reflections 12 Feb 2007 2:56 am
Reviewer: maha (Anonymous) [Report This]
    i have been trying to post on ff.net to tell you that i'm in love with your story , this is the best story i have ever read i mean it it's the best story ever , i like how you kept snape as the real snape and harry is acting like any 2-3 year old wow you realy should win some thing for this story

    please please please update so soon

    Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad you're enjoying it. I'm definitely trying to keep Snape the way I read him in JKR - wouldn't love him any other way! Got a bit of work on at the mo. but will be updating in about a fortnight. Thanks again
Title: Baby Harry and the Meeting of the Order 25 Jan 2007 12:14 am
Reviewer: Kyleigh (Signed) [Report This]
    Sirius and Snape were very... Sirius and Snape. I always enjoy Snape's moods and quirks. Well done. I liked. :o)
Title: Baby Harry and the Meeting of the Order 24 Jan 2007 5:51 am
Reviewer: ScarlettPendragon (Signed) [Report This]
    Sirius is a complete prat!! Snape has more than made up for any crimes he committed while he was a real Death Eater - and he constantly risking his life for the Order! Plus, as far as I'm concerned Sirius' dozen years in Azkaban were a fitting punishment that was long overdue for the Shrieking Shack incident, where Snape was almost killed and Lupin would have been executed for it!!
    I'm sorry poor little Harry isn't getting any sympathy or understanding for his Big Boy Rebellion - I can't wait till he trys again!! *LOL*

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