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Reviews For Child's Play
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They also both tend to tell the truth when other characters would tactfully keep their mouths shut, which likewise makes them ever so much fun to play with! -K
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First you've got the weird new magical creature. A seahorse in a waistcoat! Heh. Nice image, and I nearly spat out my soda when he spoke to Ron. (Some might say too much, but not me. Startling, yes... too much, not really.) Snape's sudden decision to do something about the Pickle family was also good and also quite unexpected. Good on him for trying something dangerous on behalf of a family he didn't even know very well... Finally, you have found a rare reader in me, because I'm honestly not all that concerned with Harry at this point. I'm much more interested in what is going on with Severus and Lucius and the general nature of the spell rather than on how Severus and Harry will become closer - because the latter is more or less a given. I could write that part *for* you, and so could anyone else who's read one or two of these. What's most interesting are the new elements you've introduced and how you handle *them*. Again, just my two knuts, as they say. ;) You've got me v. intrigued. -K
Harry is going to be an interesting kid, being 'raised' with the help of so many different people - Hermione, Snape, Sirius, Draco and Dumbledore seem to all have significant roles in his life at this point. -K
Nitpicky, I know... I love that they run into Sirius, and that Snape is apparently only able to accept baby-advice from people he doesn't already know. It's a very common sort of attitude, being too embarrassed or prideful to listen to advice from those you know well, but perfectly willing to heed the advice of a stranger. Harry's baby-mannerisms are all picture-perfect, really. He is just like a willful toddler (is there any other kind?). Harry's brief moment of realization was really quite well done. I felt sorry for him that most of it slipped rather immediately away. Good show so far! :) -K Author's Response: It's definitely the Farmers in his Den where I come from (thus speaks several years of playground school games) - I'm sure there are a few versions on the go though. I don't know about the thoughts. To me 'that was just what he needed' seems right? The narrator is king of narrating his thoughts??? But maybe you're right? Anyway thanks for the review
please please please update so soon Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad you're enjoying it. I'm definitely trying to keep Snape the way I read him in JKR - wouldn't love him any other way! Got a bit of work on at the mo. but will be updating in about a fortnight. Thanks again
I'm sorry poor little Harry isn't getting any sympathy or understanding for his Big Boy Rebellion - I can't wait till he trys again!! *LOL* |
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