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Title: Chapter Fourteen 25 Jan 2009 6:38 pm
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Could the smoke bring a bad memory to Harry?

    I like how you've given Snape habits that he doesn't really know about. It seems like he's almost an alcoholic, since he thinks about drinking every time something bad happens. I'm glad he can control it for Harry's sake.

    -P.G.
Title: Chapter Fourteen 16 Sep 2008 7:14 pm
Reviewer: Padfoot (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Absolutely amazing can't wait for me.
Title: Chapter Fourteen 04 Apr 2007 11:34 am
Reviewer: Snarky B. (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Your story doesn’t 'flow' very smoothly. There are too many disjointed and incomplete sentences. I didn't see much in the way of spelling errors, but your syntax is odd. Your story would be a lot better (and easier to read) if you’d have a beta reader check it over for you. Your story is 'okay' but has the potential to be a lot better.

    Keep writing,
    Snarky B.

    Author's Response:

    Just a note: I am quite capable of writing run of the mill syntax and grammar.  This story flows with the characters.  One thing most like about it is the unique writing style I have employed.  I realize I have sentence fragments; try cataloging speech for a conversation and see how many times you or your conversation partner speak in complete sentences.  (Hint: It won't be that many.)  Inner thoughts are even more random; at least in those suffering from PTSD, like Harry. 

    I may, for kicks, post one chapter right here all in one POV with 'normal' syntax and see how many like it better...

    Anyway, Snarky, thank you for the feedback.  However, if my story is that confusing and poorly written, you may want to stop reading it.

     

    Cheers!

    Lily 

Title: Chapter Fourteen 20 Feb 2007 5:52 am
Reviewer: Night_Childe25 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Loved it as always. Poor little Harry. I'm glad Snape's become protective of him. I hope McGonagall is properly horrified by what she's done later on. Please update soon. I'm addicted to this story.

    Author's Response: You must have ESP...oh, did I just give something away?  ;>
Title: Chapter Fourteen 20 Feb 2007 2:51 am
Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Wow!!! I'd never have thought of McGonagal doing that to a child! I'm surprised that Snape didn't do more. He's going to have quite a time dealing with flashbacks, but it may help make Snape more human. Harry is still such a mess. I'm surprised that no one has told her what Harry has been through already. I'd have expected it to be gossiped about the common dinner table already.
Title: Chapter Fourteen 18 Feb 2007 7:35 pm
Reviewer: LinerRocks (Signed) [Report This]
    oh! *twitches* *glares at cat that looks like McGonagall* poor, poor harry *hugs harry action figure*
Title: Chapter Fourteen 18 Feb 2007 4:01 pm
Reviewer: Banner (Signed) [Report This]
    * shudders *
    Sadistic Bitch. Doing that to a tiny child...
Title: Chapter Fourteen 18 Feb 2007 8:19 am
Reviewer: youngwriders (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I can't believe McGonagall would whip a child she barely knows. What a bitch! She should have just waited till Severus got back and told him what Harry had done. If Poppy and Albus got after Severus for smacking Harry on the arm with the belt, I hope someone gets after Minerva. I can't believe she'd be so harsh to Harry.

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