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Reviews For the Secret of Slytherin
TOTAL FUCKING BASTARD I DESPISE THAT SLYTHERIN no I don't I just wish he would stop being such a jackass help Author's Response: Thanks so much for all your reviews so far! Hope you finished the story, too. :) The sequel is up on ff-dot-net. I didn't figure it really ought to go here, since it does not focus so exclusively on the Harry/Severus relationship. Hope you'll join me as I post future fic!
-K
Excellent though!
I expect that Ron will either figure it out or will eventually forgive Harry after Hermione explains things. What's really sad is the truth of the statement. It's possible that Ron and Harry would have become friends as they would be roommates even if they hadn't met on the train. Given that Harry didn't want to be in Slytherin if Draco was after meeting the other boy at Madame Malkin's its most likely that he would have ended up in Gryffindor anyway. Hermione is another matter since he consciously decided that it was most likely that Harry would be in Gryffindor as his parents were and had forced to Hat to mis-Sort her before Harry was Sorted. Still, even though the words were absolutely true, we normally don't tell our friends the truth because we love them and don't want to hurt them. We may be suspicious of their motivations sometimes, but we put it aside because the relationship is bigger and more important thn the detils of how it started. All of us hide these kind of feelings. They are legitimate but we give up the right to say anything about them in order to stay connected to those we love. Its like the reason why its so hard to tell a family member or friend who is self-destructing with drugs or alcohol or some other issue that you can't enable them anymore. Incredibly well-written and emotionally racking, this is one of your best chapters yet. Bravo! Author's Response: I'm so glad it worked for you. :) Yeah, as I was writing, I kind of wondered why canon!Harry never went into this frame of mind. He's certainly angsty enough. I believe the answer is Professor Snape. All throughout Harry's childhood (age eleven on, anyway) he kept calling Harry 'our little celebrity' and going on and on about fame. This is awfully sneaky and doublethinky, but maybe Snape did that on purpose, to allow Harry to show everyone that he didn't really care about that, and so that Harry would stubbornly tell himself that he did not get where he was by using his name... Maybe that's giving canon!Snape too much credit, but it sounds like the clever sort of thing he'd do. -K
Great Chapter
I just wanted to say thank you for the story so far and alas, this is where we part ways as they say. I enjoyed the chapters written so far, and some of the ideas/concepts you had introduced were new and thusly very interesting and a pleasure to read. Although I had my qualms with some things added, like Harry being the supplement teacher, over all it was very well written and interesting in it’s newness. I am parting ways with the story simply because you have lost me twice now in the stories believability and that’s it I am afraid. First of all, to me there is nothing more important than a story that sounds real, believable, and that concerning not canon but human nature. The first event was when Harry gave up his father’s cloak, the second this Hermione/Ron incident – both are so far away from something that would fit human psychology and real events that they simply ruin the story. And by real events I mean events that come from human reactions and actions which have nothing to do with the genre of the story being written – human nature and psychology are what they are. It would not have been such a stretch if Harry was asked to give up his cloak by let’s say Dumbledore as a punishment, or Minerva but in the setting that you made here, to give it up to Draco Malfoy during this punishment (which is also on the very edge of believability but can be somewhat justified) is a complete overkill. I can think of dozens of reasons why he would never do that but the most important one of course is that it is his dead father’s cloak, the father who was killed by Voldemort and DE’s, and to give it to a son of a known DE? Never. Also the argument with Ron and Hermy is in the same category of – will never happen for that reason. They faced death together and while friends can part ways some things will always keep them tied till they die, so this again is anything but believable or in my mind a plot moving event which is not good. To use Azkaban or the threat of it as an excuse of why he did it is also not believable, you yourself provided a reason why in the earlier chapters. Adding drama to a story with believable events is important because otherwise the story looses. Amway, best of luck with this and all other stories. Just because I do not like it doesn’t mean others won’t enjoy it very much. And thanks for the part written thus far, it was enjoyable really. Author's Response: Hmm. Well, let's just say, Ash, that you're not the first who believed Harry would never give up the Cloak willingly. However, despite your assumption, his giving up the Cloak has little to do with Azkaban. Draco threatens Harry with Azkaban because that is what would move him, if someone were threatening HIM. Keep in mind that the characters as I've drawn them can be stupid or narrow-minded, and Draco doesn't understand Harry very well; he certainly doesn't understand the reasons behind Harry's actions. In short, just because Draco mentioned Azkaban doesn’t mean that Harry was moved by said threat. I think you are upset by the way I’m beating Harry about. “The moving of the characters has nothing to do with human nature?” I think you probably meant that you didn’t like or appreciate what I was making the characters do to one another. Without conflict, there’s no plot. Without conflict between the good guys, there’s no interesting plot. As far as Harry fighting Hermione and Ron, tell me you’ve never had a knock-down, drag-out fight with your best friends, and I’ll call you a liar. Harry has pent-up resentment around his relationship with both of them, and this unique situation allowed him the fight he needed without feeling guilty. Isn’t he lucky – able to say all of these things, and he isn’t even to blame? “...it is his dead father’s cloak, the father who was killed by Voldemort and DE’s, and to give it to a son of a known DE? Never.” Once again, that is your opinion. It’s an item, after all. A piece of clothing. It’s not even something his father gave him. It doesn’t represent his father’s love. It’s mostly useful. “They faced death together and while friends can part ways some things will always keep them tied till they die.” You can be very close to people and drift away from them, or fight with them and never see them again; sad, but true. There doesn’t even have to be a good, solid reason. You must be very young or very blessed if you’ve never broken with anyone you loved. Of course, I never said that the Trio would break apart, did I? This is another assumption on your part. You’re looking on the surface of the story and speaking from a place of anger and hurt at what’s happening to Harry. Do you identify with him in some way? Don’t worry, he’ll be happier in future chapters. Of course I wouldn’t break up the Trio. Of course there’s another reason (several) that Harry gave up the Cloak. Have a little faith, my friend... ...but I think it’s too late for that. Oh, well. Have a little faith, everyone but Ash! -K
I like your writing style and the story itself. I am impatient to see if the story is going to go beyond the Draco/Harry situation soon or not but I'm still enjoyin every minute of it. As far as Draco torturing Harry, from Draco's perspective, I think he is really doing a good job teaching Harry a lesson. He may not have done anything to Draco when he had him under the Imperius, but the punishment is supposed to reflect the severity of the curse. I personally think that curses are only dark if you use them darkly, but even so, the point is that Harry realize how bad it can be to cast imperius and since in your story it has those side affects, my idea doesn't count and the very act of casting it is dark, therefore, he should be punished. And you came up with some pretty clever ways for Draco to do so. Thanks!More Snape please!
I like your writing style and the story itself. I am impatient to see if the story is going to go beyond the Draco/Harry situation soon or not but I'm still enjoyin every minute of it. As far as Draco torturing Harry, from Draco's perspective, I think he is really doing a good job teaching Harry a lesson. He may not have done anything to Draco when he had him under the Imperius, but the punishment is supposed to reflect the severity of the curse. I personally think that curses are only dark if you use them darkly, but even so, the point is that Harry realize how bad it can be to cast imperius and since in your story it has those side affects, my idea doesn't count and the very act of casting it is dark, therefore, he should be punished. And you came up with some pretty clever ways for Draco to do so. Thanks!More SnapeAuthor's Response: ..."from Draco's perspective, I think he is really doing a good job teaching Harry a lesson." Congratulations on being the only person, on fanfic-dot-net or othewise, to really pin it down. That's just how Draco sees it. "The punishment is supposed to reflect the severity of the curse." Yup. Right on, again. A lot of reviewers feel bad for Harry on that count, but this really is the punishment fitting the crime. (I anticipate the hate mail now, but...) The very act of casting Imperius is dark, as you say. For more reasons than you listed. Mostly I'm writing that you seem to have gotten the basic idea of a lot of what's going on here, far before most people seem to do. So good on you!
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