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Title: CHAPTER FORTY-THREE: On His Own 07 Apr 2014 3:29 pm
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Wow! your Dumbledore is a great general - he uses people to their best abilities.
Title: CHAPTER FORTY-THREE: On His Own 30 Jul 2011 4:27 pm
Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) [Report This]
    Well, I can see why you would have felt like you'd just run a marathon emotionally while writing this (and you didn't even have an army of Persians at your heels!) after writing this chapter.

    The scene between Severus and Remus was absolutely wonderful. And here we have blatant evidence for those who won't believe that Obscura is really a very unbalanced double-edged sword. Hmmm. Peter, Remus, and Lily still being Sev's friends... Oh, my muse is humming now. Maybe she'll actually consider letting write a complete story based on that idea... one where Sev till ends up a spy...

    You're not the only person to get into the spirit of your stories so emphatically. I do it, too. The last time wasn't an HP fic but an LOTR fic that I'm still trying to complete.

    As far as what really happened here goes, I'm not sure. The comparison of the Obscura to a tumor brings back that double-edged sword metaphor again... this time with a slightly more positive spin on the results. You know, I really like the ambiguity you've given this spell. It is a wonderful example of how despite intent, the use of any spell (even one as "innocent" as Wingardium Leviosa") can have positive and negative consequences--both intended and not.

    I really admire Severus for having the nerve to Revealeo his Obscuras. He's held some of them for so long that it's probably more like doing major surgery without anesthesia than ripping off a scab from form a cut. Like Harry told his son in the epilogue to Book 7, Severus is definitely "the bravest man I ever knew".

    I have no problem with you not writing the scenes you mention in your author's note. As you said, they would just be filler and wouldn't move the story along with the same emotional intensity.

    Bravo!

    Author's Response:

    There might as well have been Persians.

    Yes, and I believe Severus having cast multiple Revealeos is a very different man than one who has not...  oooh, now I can't wait until you read the next part.  ;)

    -K


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