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Reviews For the Secret of Slytherin
Now I am worried about what happened ot Narcissa. Draco had said that he wished that he could have been a Gryffindor and tried saving his mother. Did he mean saving her from having to take the Mark? Or saving her life? I have a bad feeling that it is the latter (but I might be wrong--you've surprised me with things throughout this fic and I may be reading subtet that isn't there). I suspect that Draco still has to come to terms with his father's death, despite his intimation that he had no respect for Lucius' cowardice in taking a day to have the guts to turn an effective Killing Curse on himself. Given that it seems that he had emulated his father in looks and behaviours from the time we met him at age 11 in Madam Malkin's, his actual feelings concerning Lucius now can't be anything but complex and confusing. No, Draco's problems are far from over, this breakdown really only releases those feelings about the part of his life that are connected to Harry in some way. He still has a lot of other issues to bring out of the vault before he has any right be called healed. Whew! I think my review might rival one of your chapters for length! On to the next chapter! Author's Response: 'Emotionally ravaging'. Yay! (Uhm... wait, that isn't the appropriate response. I mean: I am so sorry. Here are some tissues?) Draco is still pretty messed up, but at the same time he's been through so much it's hard to see anything fazing him after this. I see him now as the type of character who can face any challenge with confidence. Narcissa is dealt with more in Geas of Gryffindor than here. -K
I really, really liked the way you developed this chapter. So many stories make Ron a 2 dimensional bottomless pit oblivious to anything but the obvious joke. But you have given us the REAL Ron, who's flaws ate in their own way assets. Wonderful character development and I salute you. Author's Response: Drives me crazy when people ignore Ron. Don't they know Ron is the best? -K
And Severus is wonderful in the way he handles this, regardless of his sometimes less than stellar personal skills. There are so many ways that this could have been written and I think you worked out the best possible way to do it. When Draco said the Deatheaters and Voldemort were waiting at the Manor I shivered with dread. When he said what he did about wishing he was a Gryffindor so that he could think of some way to keep his mother from dying, I had to go get the Kleenex. I have to say that I'm glad that the reason Narcissa had come to get him from Hogwarts was was due to Lucius being scheduled to be Kissed instead of her insisting that he be Marked. Oh, the heck with it! I'm going to give Draco a hug anyway! Author's Response: *Draco squirms away and gives you a suspicious glance.* I, for my part, thank you for another lovely review. And Snape is getting the hang of this mentoring thing. ;) -K
I aqbsolutely love Ron here. Despite the jealousy issues in 4th year with the TriWizard Tournament, he has always been at heart a very loyal person (I figured his leaving Harry and Hermione in Book 7 was due more to the effects of the locket Horcrux than anything else). Here we are also shown the fatal flaw of the intellectual in Hermione's response to the situation. I can sort of understand Harry. He's feeling incredibly betrayed. There's a lot of betrayal going on here, actually. Draco has possibly been betrayed by his mother and forced to take the Mark, Harry is betrayed by the fact that Drao now has the Mark and despite the flowering friendship still is programmed to expect the worst from anyone in Slytherin, and Ron feels betrayed by both Harry and Hermione for their apparent disloyalty. Wow! I've promised myself to check out your story recs once I've finished reading this story and your sequel. Everything you've mentioned sounds incredibly intriguing. Bravo again! Author's Response: <3 Ron! <3 Yes, EVERYONE'S feelings are hurt. Don't worry; I couldn't keep them miserable for long. ;) -K
Though I wonder is Draco unconscious because he really wasn't in any real physical shape to play Quidditch or is he still attached to Harry through the Imperius connection. The massive hurt that Harry is experiencing could easily be strong enough to transmit through the link and knock Draco out. I'm hanging on to my hat, this ride looks like its gong to get even MORE exciting! Author's Response: :D (And otherwise is silent). -K
I could feel Harry's, Ron's and Hermione's friendship really solidify as he finally told them his secret. I'm glad to see that there is a solution for the Quidditch problem despite Harry's impulsive decision to Re-Sort himself. I just realized how short a period of time has passed in this story, since this is the first full moon since the one on September 1st, it's barely the last week of Septemeber! Goodness there's been lots going on in only one month! Author's Response: Seriously, when it comes to timelines, pay no attention to the man behind the curtain. I kept no track whatsoever... which is why I created timelines for the sequel.
I really liked how Harry handled the First Years, particularly by giving points to the student and not their House. And I was rolling on the floor laughing (well, figuratively anyway--I don't want to wreck my laptop) at his consternation with the 3rd, 4th and 5th year girls. I'm sure he was expecting some trouble with the upper years but not that! The scene between him and Severus was perfect. I can't think of anything that needs to be added or changed. It delighted me to see them interacting in this manner. I think My favourite line was Sev's "Of course I could" in the matter of making hte potions taste better. Bravo once more. Author's Response: heh heh! Of course any students would love to make time with the famous Harry Potter, and how better but to angle for a detention. Then, when you and HP are all alone, and he's very stern and you're oh-so-penitent... yeah, right, but I could imagine the average schoolgirl spinning an epic romance from that alone. Glad you liked the Severus-Harry interaction; those scenes were some of the most fun ones to write.
-K
I really liked the way Harry and Snape were bantering when he went up to sit in Lupin's chair. However, I think that re-making the Sorting Hat was not a good idea, though Harry's case of being Slythindor may have turned what could have turned out disastrous into something helpful (at least to some people). And what is Harry being Sorted into Slytherin going to do in regards to the Gryffindor-Slytherin Quidditch match? If Harry is in Slytherin for a week and the game is in 2 days... oh, this is going to be interesting! Bravo! I loved this chapter! Author's Response: I think remaking the Hat was a terrible idea. But I also think it's hard for some people to let go of what they consider tradition. After becoming a teacher myself (after having written this story!) I can clearly see members of the community saying that they just can't *imagine* Hogwarts without its Houses, and hinting that they would stop supporting the school if the Hat were not re-made. Slytherin parents would demand to know how they could be sure their child were associating with the 'right' people, Ravenclaws would ask pointed questions about the right kind of study environment, and Gryffindors would make dark comments about exposing their children to Dark Arts practitioners in training. DDore probably wants to keep his eye on Slytherins, himself. I see this as a wrong decision, but I understand how he could make it without being Made of Evil. -K
I also liked Dudley's response. I could just hear Vernon bellowing "No more bloody owls!" And Hermione wanting to skive off Potions to look up things in the library? Ron's comment to Harry at the end was exactly what I was thinking! Bravo! Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, Draco saying that his *father* is a DE is somewhat leading. -K
An excellent chapter and much fun to read. Onwards! Author's Response: *iz interested!* Totally made-up Latin-esque stuff is what I used for this fic (and, weirdly, have continued to use the same made-up original spells in other, totally non-related fic.) But recently, in the sequel, I had to have Ron say something in Anglo-Saxon/Old English, which apparently does the whole genitive / nominative / accusative that German and Latin both also do? I used genitive case because it was possessive, but have no idea if I'm correct; everything I read on the subject seemed kind of esoteric. In short, can I ask you Latin question in future? -K |
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