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Reviews For Ashes of the Phoenix
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Finally I am getting around to reading this story! You just got to LOVE to HATE Vernon don't you? LOL! The man is a beast and I wanted to cheer when Harry stood up to him. Luckily, I don't have to wait for the next chapter, or the one after that, or after that....VBG! Tracy
However, please, please, please fix this line: "He sighed and slid the picture underneath his pillow and lied down..." The whole lie, lay, lain thing gets me, too, but I'm almost certain this should be "and lay down." This sounds funny to most people. "and laid down" is not correct but at least sounds better than "lied" which is NOT the past tense of "lay". ;-)
Your story is different. Harry remains in character instead of cowering in a corner (this thoughts about attempting to reach his wand are well-done). The first blow comes so suddenly that he doesn't know he's been hit until he hits the floor - gut-jarringly realistic, there. And there's a horrible pain in his knee before it goes somewhat numb. You seem to actually know what you're talking about. Lo and behold! ;) -K
What a great start to the story. I did notice in the early paragraphs that this sentence is missing a few words: You definately had Harry's stoicism with the knee pain and climbing the steps into the bus.
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