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Reviews For Ashes of the Phoenix
Tracy
This isn't grammatically correct, it should read: "Severus, you really should take this chance to get to know Harry." He was being entirely too cheerful. - Not Correct: “Well Severus, if that is all we have to talk about, I’ll leave Harry in your very capable hands,” Correct: "Well Severus, if that is all we have to talk about, I'll leave Harry in your very capable hands." And it's Grimmauld Place, just so you know. I'm not telling you these things to be mean, I really do quite like this fic so far and I'm merely pointing out bits that could be better. ^^ So, forge on!
Snape having Harry alone in the same house as he is, warded to the nines, sounds like a great Death Eater opportunity to me. What's to prevent Snape from giving Harry to the DEs? I don't think Snape *would*, mind you, because I think he's loyal to Dumbledore; what I mean is that from the perspective of the DEs, this is the perfect opportunity for Snape to kill Harry off. One would think that Draco would report this to his father and there would be Trouble. I'm liking your setup, though. :) I do sort of wonder what you believe Draco's loyalties to be, however. But maybe you like Draco and he is firmly on Dumbledore's side? I like him. :) -K
Author's Response: Lol, I'm getting there but I have finals for my college so need to worry about that, will work on it again soon!
“Away from you! You keep pouring potions down my throat!” Hahaha! there are so many great lines in this and Snape is positively evil! Telling Harry that Draco's coming over? Oh, priceless. And he's actually going to do it! Oh man. Great fic. Fantastic! I'm a little annoyed at Harry, he's brat but that makes him fun! This is a super enjoyable fic. Please keep writing! :D if left alone to long You use "to" a lot when it's supposed to be "too". "Too" means "as well" and it's also used to express more of something like "too bad", "too long". "To" is when you go "to" a place or if you go do something. it's part of the infinitive, like "to be", "to run", ect.
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