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Reviews For Solstice
Wow. Keepup the great work. I am so loving this more and more as you keep writing. Every chapter is better! Love it, thanks for sharing with the rest of us Harry and Snape fans!!!;).
Great chapter. I can't believe how well the characters are being portrayed. I also didn't think Draco could ever truly befriend any of them. Since he has too much thoughts of domination and jealousy in him.
Please update again soon.
HI, I like your story very much and it well written as well as cute, sometimes funny and exciting. I am eager to get to know what will happy to Sev and Harry and especially with Draco. Your Melfdragon
~Spiorad
I really like how Harry just keeps thinking and saying that he's just got the flu. I love Snape's outrage about Harry stealing from him and how expressed it to Harry. Snape then whispered icily into Harry’s ear, "Don’t ever steal from me again!" Fantastic job! I love that when Harry woke up, Dumbledore was there to help and comfort him. That's a beautiful scene but I think that Dumbledore's list of everything Snape did for Harry detracts from it. I think you should shorten that part and take out "...and he has spent the other half sitting here with you, helping you sit up everytime you were sick," because when this scene started, we are in Harry's POV and we're not really aware that he has woken up before. Maybe he doens't remember it, but as a reader I thought that this was the first time Harry had woken up since the last written one. I am a little puzzled over Hermione's actions. As I was reading, it seemed okay that she went and helped Malfoy in the hall when he was trying to escape the hospital wing, but then I thought back and remembered that he had threatened to kill her parents. I'm not sure Hermione would have been quite so nice after that. I liked how Snape caught them and how Hermione ratted on him though. :) I wish that Draco and Harry would have had more antagonism in the hospital wing. I think that would have been more entertaining, incharacter and create a better story overall if they still acted like the mostly hated each other now. There are times when they do, but I think that they are acting too nice other times. I loved Snape in the chapter, I also really like your Dumbledore. He's present but not overly so and he's fluid - he can show up and then go away and it's not like he's just being used. He's part of the story. I forgot to mention what a fantastic line this was last chapter: "I’m on the only side worth fighting for," Harry stated. |
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