| Title: Chapter One
| 15 Oct 2008 1:34 am
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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Oh, twinkletoes! "His seed?" It's so very Biblical of you! And Severus is such a grouch- I love it! But don't get too inflated. I'm sure I'll find something to criticize soon.
| Title: Prologue
| 15 Oct 2008 1:29 am
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| Reviewer: Livi (Anonymous)
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Yours is the best characterization of Old Dumbles that I've seen on the site to date, sunshine. I really like that last line, 'love has its own power.' Very Dumbledore, and properly punctuated to whit!
These lines contain the real magic, psychologically: "Another man's seed," Lily mused. "Your seed. James Potter's wife round and full of Severus Snape's child." Her words were soft and despite her promise of no magic there was a kind of thrill to them that ran along Snape's spine and made him quiver.
You have done a terrific job with this story. I like it VERY much.
| Title: Epilogue
| 23 Aug 2008 12:43 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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Delightful story. Magical in fact. Thank you so much.
| Title: Chapter Three
| 23 Aug 2008 12:01 pm
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| Reviewer: aalens (Anonymous)
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This is so emotive! I'm loving it. (Written in good English too - which is an added benefit as is not often the case with fanfics. LOL)
| Title: Epilogue
| 10 Jul 2008 9:15 am
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| Reviewer: Morrolan (Anonymous)
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Interesting ending. I liked this story very much.
Oh, I'm enjoying reading this SO much. It's very poetic, how you have Severus responding to Harry.
I'm greatly enjoying reading this. There's a few little nit-picky things - for example Brit-isms; in this chapter for example, you mention Vernon having to buy Harry glasses; whereas they'd actually have been free for children (Vernon certainly wouldn't have spent any money on buying nicer ones than the NHS offers).
Overall though I'm very much enjoying myself and will go right on reading now!
Oh i like it. The way you right is spellbounding. Clear. Consise and to the point. I especially like this part:
"It was the most curious feeling.
It was like... magic.
The way sensation rushed from every point their bodies touched. The way something in the small fragile weight sitting on his hip was reaching into his chest, clutching at his heart, squeezing it.
It seemed Harry felt it too, for with a sigh, almost as if the puppet had had his strings cut, he lay his head on his father's shoulder.
"Daddy," he murmured, white hot heat of damp breath against the skin of Snape's neck.
Arms tightened, that mysterious magic spell shifting through him like blood through veins, like a living thing. Severus breathed in the child's scent and a word pulsed in his brain.
Mine."
Oh that last part was brilliant. You can almost feel the possessiveness take hold of him before he's even given it another thought its enraptured him.
Can't wait to read one.
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