Title: Chapter 3
| 13 Apr 2007 8:48 pm
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Reviewer: Shanna (Anonymous)
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Pretty good so far. As for other stories similiar theres one on fanfiction dot net. He's not a YOUNG child, but a child none the less, and develoups cancer...
It's called Recnac Transfaerso and it's by Celebony...also a good read.
Title: Chapter 6
| 26 Mar 2007 5:36 am
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Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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"boy's bald raven head"? lol Sorry, I don't usually require stories to be perfectly written, but this just created a traffic jam in my head. :D
Title: Chapter 4
| 22 Mar 2007 6:53 pm
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Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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Ugh, the rating system on this site is seriously flawed if a story like this is getting the same number of chocolate frogs as AYLNO.
Or maybe it's not the rating system, but rather the audience's lack of discernment.
The mark of a good, caring author is the attempt at plausibly explaining some inconsistencies. You say you "need" things to be a certain way but make no effort to justify the changes beyond your self-absorbtion. Do you serve yourself or the story? What does the *story* "need"?
Title: Chapter 2
| 22 Mar 2007 6:49 pm
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Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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I tried, I just can't get into it. Is he still three years old? He speaks, thinks, and acts like a much older child. The world-weariness could be explained by his lack of a nurturing environment, but the verbal and cognitive abilities are well beyond a normal child. If anything, one would expect him to be linguistically behind.
Title: Chapter 8
| 21 Mar 2007 7:42 pm
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Reviewer: Anon (Anonymous)
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"Tow," not "toe," leukemia is a blood cancer, it begins in the blood, it does not spread to the blood, "die" not "dye." Also, I highly doubt Harry would call Severus by anything other than his given name unless strictly ordered to after his experience in an orphanage and with the Dursleys.
Title: Chapter 7
| 20 Mar 2007 7:42 pm
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Reviewer: blue artemis (Anonymous)
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Title: Chapter 6
| 19 Mar 2007 5:31 am
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Reviewer: Alx Black (Anonymous)
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...and I'm sure Severus will be thrilled to learn that they are pumping Harry full of poison.
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