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Reviews For O Mine Enemy
You've created such a great suspenseful situation here. I don't know how Harry will convince Snape that his visions aren't from Voldemort, because what Other Harry is asking him to do is exactly what Voldemort wants. And even Harry himself couldn't believe Other Harry at first! And what more, will Harry tell Snape that the war hinges also on him as the rescuer? Can Snape know that in advance without messing things around? I also love how the chapter was structured. Before the vision-dream, Snape tells Harry that so many of his pleasant memories are tied to bad ones too. And then that theme gets echoed throughout the chapter. First, Harry finds comfort in the scent of a man who has always tormented him and riled him up. Then, in the dream, Harry sees a wonderful future, but again, this wonderful future vision is tied to an awful revelation of what Harry must do to turn the war in his favor. So really, I admire the way you structured it all and reinforced Snape's initial observation that even Harry's most pleasant thoughts can immediately lead to the darker thoughts and worries. And as I've said from the start - I love the way you write both Harry and Snape. Harry is so endearing and frank and funny (I was laughing right along with him, and I loved this thought especially: "How could one person be so infuriating, even when they were supposedly trying to help?")And Snape... wow. One of the many things I love about your Snape is that you're able to give him his long, vocab-powered sentences without having it sound forced. And I think it's so lovely how he tries to convince himself and Harry that he doesn't care (yeah, right, Snape...) I'll be waiting for the next chapter with great anticipation. And though you've said it's too early for you to make any promises about a sequel, I really really hope you write one, even if the updates are few and far between. Author's Response: :) Oh, how I LOVE long reviews!! I'm glad that you saw the structure of the chapter. It wasn't planned that way initially; it just kind of worked itself out. And thanks for your comments on Snape & Harry!
Author's Response: Thank you!
I was gettin' a little nervous coming down to the end of this chapter like "No, I don't want it to end!!" But I have to say, that the last few paragraphs were sufficiently satisfying. Definitely filled the Aww-factor for today. I love the way you write Harry. I LOVE it. You write him so realistically, not just through dialogue, but also in his actions. One of my favorite parts of this chapter was where Harry was laughing uncontrollably. It was great. And then Snape going back and forth calling Harry by his first name, and then Potter, and then Harry again. That was amazing. And he even chuckled! Your Snape is perfect. I'm very impressed how you keep him SO in character but are still able to interject a few moments of kindness. It's much more effective than fluffy!Snape. I'm sad this chapter is over. Guess that means I'll just have to read it again... lol. By the way, I'm holding you to the promise of a finished story. I think I'd go slightly crazy if this masterpiece were incomplete. Keep up the excellent work. Your writing is inspiring. Author's Response: Thank you, thank you for the review! I am glad you enjoyed the chapter! I'm glad to hear you like my characterizations of Harry and Snape - I'll try to keep it up with your expectations! :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I know - I wanted Snape to sing, but when I suggested it, he threatened not to be in the story if I wrote it in. I didn't want to risk a Snape Strike. Sorry!
Beth
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