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Reviews For O Mine Enemy
Oooh, poor Harry, I really hope he doesn't end up seeing Mrs Figg's unfortunate demise ... as if he hasn't seen enough horrible things already! Gaarrgh, Snape, you could try being a little more sympathetic to Harry, couldn't you?! *sigh* But anyway, I can't WAIT to see Harry and Snape's Occlumency session in the next chapter Author's Response: As I answered to someone else...it was either Mrs. Figg or Lupin. Are you as sad now? But don't worry, Lupin's staying put, and he'll re-enter the picture in a few chapters or so.
Now that is a clever way to force Snape and Harry into a kind of reluctant intimacy. Although I imagine eventually Snape will cotton onto the fact that Harry probably isn't trusting him so much as he's martrying himself by forcing himself to make personal confessions to someone he has no reason to believe will be other than unsympathetic. And then he'll get snarky again. I was watching Grey's Anatomy season 2 on DVD there's a scene where one character points to another and says "I want you to sit down and try to pretend that you aren't scary and damaged." I'd like to do the same to your Snape, assuming I could do it from minimum safe distance. Anyway, awesome update. Author's Response: MR. TIBBLES! I FORGOT ABOUT HIM!!! BRANWYN, QUICK! YOU BUY THE PLANE TICKETS, I'LL GET THE CAT FOOD!!! (If that doesn't seem quite fair to you, I'll spot for coffee in the airport.) I don't think Snape's in danger of losing his snarkyness, no matter how much Harry does or does not rub off on him... :) hehe, I like that image. But yes, say it from a safe distance, please.
I'm glad something has finally reached Harry, as he was beginning to get on my nerves, as canon Harry tends to do. It is sad though that it had to happen to such a sweet person. Your Snape is wonderfully portrayed. I would love to see the two of them start to get closer. The mirror episode was perfect and I expected Harry to soften more, but he is being especially stubborn and doesn't seem to be trying very hard. If I were Snape, I would be concerned about the future of the wizarding world about now also. While your Harry makes sense, one still needs to believe that this young man can save everyone...with this mentor. I believe in the mentor that you've portrayed, I trust in you to make me believe in the savior given the great job you've done thus far! Looking forward to more! Arwen Author's Response: I am so happy you discovered and like my story! I make no apologies for Harry - he'll have to do so himself. ;) As much as I don't want you to get too frustrated with Harry, I hope you'll excuse me for being kind of glad that you are. See, when I started this fic, I knew right off that I didn't want him to have everything together. He is smart, empathetic, and has great potential for power. BUT he's a kid, with all the immaturity, stubborness, impulsiveness that implies. My purpose for portraying him as such (other than it simply being realistic of someone his age) is this: If Harry had it all together...if you could already see the perfect savior of the wizarding world in his 16-year old self... What would he need Snape for?
Author's Response: Thank you for your congratulations! It means a lot to me that you took the time to review. :) And don't feel bad about reading my story instead of studying. Research is overrated, anyway. Fanfiction is where the joy is. ;P
Author's Response: Thanks! I've been tending to update about once a week, usually Sunday night. No promises, of course, only tendencies... :)
The secret code talk was interesting, and I loved when they were discussing Occlumency--how Snape couldn't believe Harry imagined his cupboard, and Harry telling Snape that he still didn't know the important stuff about Harry. He's right, too. But I wonder if Harry ever will trust him enough to let Snape know some of the 'important stuff'? Poor, poor Arabella Figg! What a horrible death, or is there a small hope that she could be rescued in time? And poor Harry. My heart breaks for him and the huge burden of guilt he's carrying. That was another nice Harry and Snape moment, when Snape came back and tried to comfort, or at least distract Harry. Now I can't wait to see what's going to happen in the next chapter! Are you sure Snape won't sing? Not even a little bit? Cause I think a sweet lullaby would help Harry get right to sleep. How about humming? Author's Response: Yes, will Harry ever trust him enough? I can't tell you how much I just want to throw them into a nice mentor/mentee relationship tomorrow, complete with trust and cuddles! Unfortunately, with the history these two share, a snail's pace is about the best I can do. ;) I feel bad for choosing Mrs. Figg, but better her than Lupin, right? Yes, don't yell at me for considering Lupin's demise, however briefly! It didn't happen! I repeat, it didn't happen!!! Anyway, Lupin will be too important to me for other reasons later on... Sing? Hum? To Harry? I think Snape would rather choke on those moldy cabbages boiled in beetle stew.
I can imagine how frustrating it was for Harry trying to sleep with Dobby constantly popping in to check on him. And when Dobby thought Harry was dead, and Snape rushed in--well, it's just a matter of time for those two, isn't it? Another thing I liked was when they were talking about Harry almost being sorted into Slytherin, and Snape said that Slytherin does not equal bullying. If I were Harry, I'd have been tempted to make some snarky remark about how Snape has always done such a great job of demonstrating that. But I suppose Snape wouldn't have taken it very well...on the other hand, the truth hurts sometimes. Great conversation when Snape admitted that he had been wrong about Harry--and it's just so wonderfully 'Snape-ish' that in the same breath he's trying to also blame Harry for never correcting him ("All right, I was wrong about you, but it's still all your fault!"). Still, Snape went took a big step forward as far as I'm concerned when he fixed the sharp edges of the mirror and gave it back to Harry. Now I'm off to read Chapter 19. Author's Response: Yes - Snape, Snape, Snape...tsk. That's the thing about him that I have the hardest time reconciling if he were to develop a closer relationship with Harry - the bullying, not only of Harry, but of children in general. I'll definitely need to be addressing that a bit more down the road... Thanks! I had wanted Snape to give Harry an indication that his perceptions were beginning to change, but he's so very closed off and not exactly about to give Harry a big hug, so...blaming Harry for it all seemed the next best thing in Snape-land. ;)
Author's Response: I'm liking these long chapters, too! They generate fun reviews! :) Thank you!
Anyway, the dialogue was really great in this chapter! I love how you write Harry. All of the "ums" seem to be perfectly placed, and his voice is just so...so...accurate, for lack of a better word. *is tired* I also loved how Harry kept trying to get into a fight with Snape, but he wouldn't allow Harry to make him angry. Although, for a minute there, I thought that crap was going to hit the fan. But, yay Snape! Way to hold it in! The anger, that is. This line was definitely my favorite and made me laugh outloud: “She sang to me,” Snape answered, surprising Harry by not kicking him out of the lab. "Oh." Yeah, definitely not going to ask Snape to do that. Just the thought would have been enough to cause Harry to shudder if he weren’t already shaking. **Loved it. LOVED IT!!! Oh, but Snape, I can sense you softening! A tad, anyway. He may not actually tuck Harry in, but I'll be he WANTS TO!! *points accusingly* Yes, Snape, you do. I just loved this chapter so much. I love your Harry. I love your Snape even more. I just....*sobs with joy* Thanks for the update :) You're the best! Author's Response: Haha! Snape humming a tune on his way down the corridors to Potions class...now that would probably cause more than a little shock to Hogwarts, yes? :) Thank you for the review! It made me smile so much to hear what you liked!
It is great fun watching Harry come to trust Snape even if he doesn't realize that is what he is doing. Poor Mrs. Figg. But she was a good choice to fill this role in the story. And I do believe that methinks Snape protests too much in this line: "“Prepare for bed, Potter. We will convene in your room in fifteen minutes. And I will not,” Snape repeated, lifting his chin, “be tucking you in, singing you to sleep, or otherwise acting in any way parental toward your wretched teenaged self.”" Author's Response: hehe, I'm glad I'm not the only one who liked that line! It doesn't mean so much to like it if I'm the one who wrote it... ;) Yes, poor Mrs. Figg. I had a hard time choosing her, since I like her & she really doesn't deserve it. But she made the most sense for my purposes. :( Protest too much, indeed... :) |
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