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Reviews For O Mine Enemy
Author's Response: I am so glad that you think this Snape and Harry in character! I try to look at things through their perspectives when I am writing, and if I don't feel that they would act in a certain way, then I try to figure out how I think they would act, then write that. I really can't see canon Snape turning mushy on any student, much less Harry, after one week of revelations. I'm glad you feel the same. :)
I didn't think I'd ever enjoy a chapter more than the one where Snape first questions him at the Dursley's house, but this definitely tops it. Author's Response: Thank you, Branwyn! You put thought into this - that makes me so happy! :) I especially love how you commented that "Harry pointing that he would never have been believed is no doubt twice as infuriating for being undeniably true." SO true! I'm so happy I was able to top your previous favorite, even if it pushed my other chapter off of the list. I'll just have to try to come up with another favorite or two down the road... :)
Good to see Severus showing a bit of his heart. That last chapter ended in such a way as to make one think Severus was acting awfully childish, let alone petty, given that Harry was actually acting more mature than he was, for a bit. One has to wonder, now that Severus is seeing the error of his beliefs, if this epiphany will now allow him to be the one to be able to see what Harry needs, and give him that support and guidance. Harry really hasn't had any adult he can trust that way, one wonders if Severus understands that now, as much as I wonder of Harry can learn to give that trust, or if he will keep that mind-set he has been forced to develop in order to survive - the one that he is resonsible for himself, that there is no one to go to. That would be awfully hard to break; it's the one that drove me nuts in canon - hopefully the wish to have someone he could go to, will be strong enough to allow him to develop such trust. In many ways, Harry is more mature than other students his own age. Yet, he really does sound a bit ADHD in his inability to focus for even 10 seconds, even if it is on something he really doesn't particularly like. But then, he's also been traumatized, and is in the process of dealing with a lot of changes and pressure, which can cause similar state of mind - for a while at least. Author's Response: Ooh, I'm going to have to be careful of keeping my emotional sections too long - I don't want you to run out of air!!! I'm glad you still enjoyed it... ;) I'm in the middle of writing the next chapter...and it's funny that you mention trust... :) I do see that about Harry: he really isn't used to having anybody to rely on (other than his friends, of course). I think he would have a hard time completely trusting any adult at this point, especially someone like Snape. I kinda like how he has a hard time focusing...it makes him more of a teenager in need of guidance. (Especially a teenager with a lot of things bumping around in his head that he'd prefer to avoid thinking about.) But still...I'll try to tell him to work on the ADHD. ;)
But Oh. My. God. This chapter was so GOOD!! I loved everything about it. I actually laughed outloud when Harry was trying the breathe-and-count-to-one-hundred exercise. It struck me as funny. And the conversation with Snape via Dobby was brilliant. I loved that part. Poor Harry, trying so hard to be respectful...lol. And actually, I like the subtle civility between Harry and Snape. If they link arms and skip down the hall too soon, it's just not realistic. Okay, and favorite scene: the mirror shard. *sniff* The best moment in that scene is where Snape is filing down the sharp edges. Nothing is spoken, but there is just so much tension/emotion in that scene, you could cut it with a knife. It just made me want to dash at the two and demand a group hug. Oh, and I really enjoyed this line as well: “Wow. Um, wow…you put all that thought into every petty thing you do? No wonder you always manage to make my blood boil. I’m, um…I’m actually tempted to be impressed, if you weren’t always thinking against me…” I guess there's nothing left for me to do but reread this chapter. There are only about three stories that make me scroll to the top immediately upon finishing and yours is one of them. *dramatically high-fives you* This is pure brilliancy. Keep it up! Author's Response: I'm on my lunch break now, as it so happens! :) I am so glad that you came back to finish it, though; otherwise, you'd have missed some Harry angst. Thank you, thank you, thank you so much for your kind review! I am glad you enjoyed reading the chapter as much as I enjoyed writing it. And whew! Good thing I scrapped the linking arms & skipping down the hall part from the next chapter! hehe ;) Go - reread! and then reread again! You won't hear any complaints from me. ;)
Author's Response: Snape was worried. He'd never admit it to you himself, so I'll confide in you on his behalf. Crazy, out of his mind worried! :( Thanks for the review!
LOL. Well, most are, but I'm pretty damn sure that Voldemort was born scheming XD And Harry totally pwns Snapey in this chapter. So I'm going to give them equal points, because Harry has (in a sort of roundabout way) employed his deeply-buried cunning, and Snape has begun to address some of his own misconceptions about Harry. PLUS the whole "panic, relief, ANGER!!! X(" thing from Snapey was funny. Emotions totally suit you, man XD (and now I'm talking like one of those stoners from a teen movie. That, or those surfer-turtles from Finding Nemo XD) So all in all, a rocking chapter and a very happy Sweartoad XD Author's Response: hehe, yes, you do have a point. If Draco Malfoy was sorted before the sorting hat even touched his head, Voldemort was probably sorted from about a mile away.
Author's Response: Yes, now if only they can keep it up... Thanks for the review!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you like his characterization! XOXO back atcha! ;)
The end of this chapter had me choked up a little too. And I was just as startled as Harry when Snape had his little outburst about how hating Harry is no longer effortless. It makes me wonder when Harry will have the same thoughts about Snape; I don't think, at this point, that he can hate Snape as much as he used to. As you put it, they're not exactly best friends now, not even close, but they're slowly forming an understanding of each other (with Snape's understanding of Harry progressing more than Harry's understanding of Snape). The idea of Dobby popping in and out all night to check on Harry was funny, mainly because it's a counterproductive way to ensure that Harry gets an undisturbed night's sleep; and then Dobby being a messenger between Harry and Snape - what fun! I also laughed at Harry's attempt at the first exercise (as someone whose past attempts at meditation ended with the same intrusion of extraneous thoughts and loss of focus, I can sympathize). But then, reading about the cupboard... I wanted to give Harry a hug; he thinks he doesn't really need parental love now, but the does, or at least someone to see that he's still a child who needs to be looked after. Snape's a good candidate. I have a sneaking suspicion that he asked Dobby to monitor Harry's sleep not necessarily because he doesn't trust Harry (though that might be one of the reasons) but because he wants to know ASAP if Harry's stuck in a nightmare and needs to be rescued from it; deep deep down, he's worried. I hope Harry gets more lessons in cunning from Snape (even though Snape's little outburst wasn't too smooth or cunning - funny how on the one hand Snape can be so inscrutable, but then at the next moment he can totally lose his temper). Their conversations are wonderful. You have a blend in this story of very absorbing drama mixed in with sarcasm and humor; Harry's observations, even about dark things, are often so amusing. I hope your next chapter is up soon; this story is addictive. Author's Response: This was one of my favorite chapters to write, and when you like a chapter, you really hope that the readers will like it, too. So I'm really glad that you did! I wanted to show Snape's understanding progressing more than Harry's because he's the one who started the hatred-based-relationship they've had thus far. Harry wouldn't be so insolent to him if he weren't following Snape's lead. I think Harry needs to see something worth caring about, and the only way that will happen is if Snape shows a different side of himself first. I kinda feel like I gave something away here, but then I remember - the "Snape mentors Harry" bit in the story summary kinda gave it all away before the story even started! ;) P.S. And yes, I too think that Snape's sending of Dobby had a little more worry attached to it than Harry imagines.
1. Harry could probably find a way to get into trouble even if he was locked in a padded room. 2. One step forward, two steps back (this chapter being a 'one step forward' chapter. It's almost like Snape and Harry are playing "Mother, may I?" Do you know that game? Except in this case it's "Kirby Lane, may we?" May we take one small step towards developing an extremely shaky, but somewhat genial relationship before either one of us kills the other? A bit of a stupid thought, but funny, regardless. Anyway, I'm going to send this off before it gets deleted AGAIN. I loved the chapter and can't wait for more. Author's Response: Thank you for wanting to leave a review so much that you tried three times! You are awesome! ;) 1. haha LOLOLOL! I laughed when I read that - it is so true! hehe 2. I played that game once or twice when I was little, but I don't remember it very well. I get the idea, though. Only, Snape and Harry keep asking me if they can just continue to hate each other, and I keep throwing them together in hopes that they don't. So I'll take the credit for the one step forward and blame them for the two steps back. ;) |
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