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Reviews For O Mine Enemy
Um, is there a cure or treatment for ADHD in the wizarding world, that would allow Harry to focus, and learn - because it is clear that he is intelligent, simply distracted and impulsive. Author's Response: Are you a teacher? :) Most of my family are teachers, and my roommate is actually a special education teacher - she works with quite a few kids with learning and attention disorders. It was just funny to hear you refer to terms she uses all the time. ;) I hadn't thought of Harry as having ADHD specifically, though it's an interesting idea. In his case I was thinking more along the lines that he has a hard time focusing on things that he doesn't see as important...like Potions and Occlumency. He quite simply doesn't care about those subjects, and I think trying to focus on a huge jargon-filled book about a subject you don't care about would make anyone a little antsy. (Especially with everything else on his mind.) Hermione, on the other hand, I'm sure would be thrilled! :) As for a treatment...well, I'm not going the ADHD route specifically, but I'm sure a task-oriented mentor would be able to figure out a few things to help. Hmm...where could we find such a person, I wonder? ;) Thank you for the review!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! And welcome back from vacation!
I love how they barter questions back and forth, it's a way for them to get to know one another without actually admitting that they want to know each other. I also liked how Harry pointed out that Snape really never gave him much of a chance to learn Occlumency correctly. Maybe it'll hit home with the Potions professor. Looking forward to the next chapter! Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I hope you continue to read & enjoy!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Yes, improvement is looming...slow but steady! :)
And now my two favorite parts of the chapter! Part one: Yes, sir,” Harry answered automatically, picking up the book. May as well quit while he was ahead. He could celebrate later that Snape had forgotten he had another turn left– “Oh, and Potter?” Snape interrupted his thoughts, “My round of questions shall be considered delayed, rather than forfeited. I fully intend to collect, I assure you.” LOVED IT!!!! Just when Harry thought that he had won the battle, and outsmarted Snape...! Perfect! And number two: “If you are in such dire need of a break, go to the laboratory and begin your puffer-fish sorting. I’ll expect you back in fifteen minutes to continue your reading.” “Er…no thanks. I’m at a…really good spot.” I started laughing incontrollably at that part! Terrific dialogue, and it was interesting to finally get some answers out of Snape! I definitely can't wait for the next chapter! Thanks for giving me a well written story to look forward to all of the time! Author's Response: I am so in LOVE with long reviews! THANK YOU!!! Yes, I love Snape finding out about the sorting hat too, but I've always believed that Harry wouldn't volunteer the information willingly. Really, I don't think Harry yet cares too much what Snape thinks of him since he doesn't respect the man's views on anything else...so volunteering the information in order to get Snape to reevaluate him isn't something I see Harry doing. And he's proud of being a Gryffindor. He wouldn't want to be anything else. So glad you liked those parts of the fic! They were fun to write. The most fun thing to hear from reviewers is that something in the story made them laugh. It makes me smile...so thank you for making me smile! :)
First off...amazing dream sequence! Honestly... I was so caught up in the story that I didn't even bother to answer my cell phone when it rang. I don't ever not answer my phone, so consider that as a major compliment to your talented writing skills. I wonder when Harry will talk to Dumbledore about the second prophecy. Hmm...the plot thickens... Snape is amazing in this chapter as usual. Honestly, I am amazed by his wonderful skills in sarcasm. Perhaps he took a class Sarcasm 101: How to be snarky and sarcastic to everyone you meet (especially with those who annoy you)or perhaps Creative Insulting. Ha ha. Well I'm off to read the next chapter! Author's Response: hehe, I SO relate to the work vs. college thing! I work fulltime (plus a part-time job, plus an internet class), and I really, really miss college. I want to rewind...because the great thing about college is that even though you're busy, your time is your own - YOU get to decide whether to study now or later...or even to not study at all! *sigh* Can I come with you? I especially want to take that Sarcasm 101 class - it sounds like fun!! Oh, please make your apologies to whomever was calling you. (But I'm really not sorry - it thrills me that you were that into the story.) And keep reading...the plot shall continue to thicken... :)
I love how Snape seems to be a bit amused at Harry's attempts at being Slytherin, and Harry wondering if Snape was Draco's Sirius was a cute touch. Author's Response: Thank you for the review, bluebird88! I'm glad you liked it - those bits you commented on were so fun to write! :)
Author's Response: hehe - glad you liked it! Thanks for the review!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review, sunsethill! And yes, making it too easy for Snape would be boring for both him and for us. ;)
I love well-written mind games between Harry and Snape, and this one was great. I like how Snape's interest in Harry is increasing, even though he'd poison himself before admitting it. And I like how you betray that interest in little gestures, like when his lips barely twitch in amusement at Harry's rather Slytherin reasoning. Snape has always struck me as someone who loves puzzles, and I think that after his slowness at understanding how horrible Harry's life was at the Dursleys, he seems like he's finally looking past his big Harry Potter blind spot and taking it as a challenge to figure out other things about the boy. Sort of like the way he'd study a mysterious potions ingredient :) It was great how you wrote both Harry's Gryffindor and Slytherin sides here - he charges into a conversation with Snape, but then uses some cunning in unsettling the other man and getting some interesting info out of him. Though I don't think he's close to being able to out-Slytherin Snape. But he can always try... Interesting development with Draco. It has the potential for a lot of intrigue and maybe a future alliance even, if Draco does change sides (I can't really see him and Harry being true friends, but I could see them as making an alliance under certain circumstances). It was pretty heart-breaking reading Harry's thoughts about how Draco has a family and godfather, and Harry doesn't, even though Harry's relationships were always based on love; it seems Snape was trying to figure out Harry's thoughts at that point, but I don't think he could've guessed, seeing as for all his smarts and cunning he's pretty emotionally stunted. And that's probably true of Draco too - he might have family, but what values have they given him? At least Harry, for all his horrible upbringing, is still a genuinely decent person. I hope you update as soon as you can. Author's Response: Ooh, I LOVE long reviews like this one! They make chocolate and caramel pale in comparison! You really have thought through the story a lot, which is really thrilling to hear. It also reassures me that what I am trying to get across is what is actually getting across. :) The part about Harry's Slytherin vs. Gryffindor traits, especially, is right on. I see Harry as having quite the capability for cunning & being sneaky, but even when he lets those sides show, they're colored with his Gryffindor courage & impulsiveness. He'd have a hard time matching Snape's pure Slytherin-ness. Doesn't mean he won't try though... ;) Also love your thoughts re: Harry's & Draco's families & values. Right on! |
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