Wow, great chapter. So Severus looked into a pensieve?
Author's Response: Yep.... well he was hoping to find out something that could help the side of the light. Even though Voldie is gone (for now)... doesn't mean everything is all fine and dandy.
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| 17 Jun 2007 9:03 am
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| Reviewer: Nayeli (Anonymous)
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wow, such an original way for sevitus to happen, and even a creative way for severus to discover the truth.. i absolutely love it., keep writing, I urge you to keep writing Severitus stuff.. and can I bother you for help on my severitus fics?.. nayelitiaret13@yahoo.com ... please reply
Author's Response: Eek, I don't really have easy access to an e-mail account right now due to my computer being a b*tch.... but as soon as I am able to get into it, I'll definately e-mail you. I'm not sure what kind of help you are looking for, but I'll help if I can.
I like the way you described Godric's Hollow--unique and interesting. You also did a fine job with the emotions surrounding the discovery by Severus.
The chapter was marred, though, by all the errors that can not be caught by spellcheck. There were two instances where "saw" became "was," and several other times where the mistake was a real word--just not the correct word. It really breaks up the flow and takes away from the emotion.
Author's Response: thank you. I'll go through and fix those errors.
That bottle of milk in the house must be rather sour by now....
Author's Response: nah. it's still good actually due to that handy preservation charm over the whole house. Drink it... I dare you.... go ahead.
Poor Snape. The opening line of this chapter was so heartbreaking. What a plot! I think it's great so far!
Author's Response: *L* It took me almost a whole work shift just to get that first line the way I wanted it.
good chapter.
Author's Response: thanks!
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