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Reviews For Emotional Commotion
Some typos: “You should have had to earn your keep... Chores are mostly mean to teach..." You should NOT have had... Chores are mostly meant to teach "Harry’d already denied being beaten and Severus figured there wee three possibilities here." were Author's Response: Thanks much! I shall try my ver hardest to update as soon as possible. Thanks for the typo pointers! I totally love that you can go back and fix things without having to upload the whole chapter all over again... I love this place.
Author's Response: thankies! I almost wrote myself into a corner with that one and had to rip the pages out of my notebook and write it all over again. I'm glad it finally turned out alright and that you like it.
Author's Response: Thanks muchly!
Author's Response: ohhh... *hugs* no more tears!... well, unless I write something terribly emotional. I'm glad that you feel better now.
Author's Response: poor guilt-ridden harry. hehe. Thanks!
Author's Response: I did think that was funny too. Thanks!
I loved this: "It wouldn’t make Harry drowsy so much as it would… make him higher than a muggle kite." LOL! Oh poor Harry. I liked Snape's observations a lot. I did notice some typos: "...he looked up from the book to see Professor Snape sitting in one of the armchairs with a book of his on." own. "'Harry nodded and hurried out to put it away. In his room, he set them on his nightstand..." it on his nightstand "“Oh” Harry nodded. He waited until Snape started eating before he dug in. His potions were small..." portions "Roasted chicken and vegetables, cottage cheese, and a bread roll." Might want to add "were on is plate" "Has full as the day had been..." As "His awareness showed with his embarrassed silence the faint redness that showed on his neck and face whenever he remembered something he’d done the other two days." This is hard to understand. I think that that was it! Fantastic chapter. :D I want to see Harry fly! Will Snape fly with him? I liked how Snape gave Harry the book his mum loved. That was so sweet. Thanks for posting! Author's Response: Wonderful review. I brought up a new window so I could make the edits that you had pointed out. As for Camelot... er.... let's say that Aunt Petunia had a mild crush on Richard Harris and listened to the soundtrack alot... on full blast so that the whole family had to hear. *L*
Author's Response: thank you very much!
Author's Response: Ah... Snape will confirm it one way or the other when Harry is aware of the truth and Snape and he have a talk. Hmmm.... maybe they COULD watch Star Wars..... I think you might have given me an idea for something later on. Good on you.
Author's Response: Don't be too intrigued by the work out room. Whenever I write a story that involves a new house, I draw it out first so that I don't forget where everything is and then write something totally different one chapter than in another chapter. I just had an extra space in the house and needed to fill it.... plus, Snapes kinda a pale guy and I figure he doesn't really work out in the sun too much so he probably gets his exercise inside. hehe.... the heir of Slytherin. Yeah i thought that would be great fun. |
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