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Title: Ephesians 6:4 31 May 2007 8:03 pm
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Yay! :) Nice chapter and great way to end it. I liked how Harry got up when Snape invaded his personal space and then Snape apologized for it, being all cool. That is much more realistic and in character than other options. The shed and discussion of Harry's chores was good. I like watching Snape struggle with connecting with his son, without actually telling him the truth. It's very interesting. Update when you can!

    Some typos:
    “You should have had to earn your keep... Chores are mostly mean to teach..." You should NOT have had... Chores are mostly meant to teach

    "Harry’d already denied being beaten and Severus figured there wee three possibilities here." were

    Author's Response:

    Thanks much! I shall try my ver hardest to update as soon as possible.

    Thanks for the typo pointers! I totally love that you can go back and fix things without having to upload the whole chapter all over again... I love this place.

Title: Ephesians 6:4 31 May 2007 3:58 pm
Reviewer: Phoenix (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Wonderful! Harry was great and I like the slytherin vs slytherin thinking(not going to give anything away) talk about the chores that Harry used to do. Severus is perfect not taking everything at face value and not wanting to think the worst of him - just wonderful. Looking forward to the next update.

    Author's Response: thankies! I almost wrote myself into a corner with that one and had to rip the pages out of my notebook and write it all over again. I'm glad it finally turned out alright and that you like it.
Title: Ephesians 6:4 31 May 2007 10:39 am
Reviewer: LindseySnape (Signed) [Report This]
    That chapter was great, I loved how Severus and Harry compromised, and Sev told him upfront what he wouldn't do to him if he misbehaves, so very important for Harry. Loving your fatherly Severus BTW. Keep up the great work and please update soon. LES

    Author's Response: Thanks muchly!
Title: Ephesians 4:26 27 May 2007 9:13 am
Reviewer: LinerRocks (Signed) [Report This]
    thank you... i was crying earlier... but you helped with Drugged-Up Harry .. thank you so much!

    Author's Response:

    ohhh... *hugs* no more tears!... well, unless I write something terribly emotional.

    I'm glad that you feel better now.

Title: Ephesians 4:26 25 May 2007 9:54 pm
Reviewer: Phoenix (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Aw ... Great job Severus to put up with the attitude when we all know how much he hates it. Harry, appologized but I'll bet he still feels guilty. Look forward to the next chapter.

    Author's Response: poor guilt-ridden harry. hehe. Thanks!
Title: Ephesians 4:26 25 May 2007 8:55 am
Reviewer: Gillianne (Signed) [Report This]
    The head marshmallow line was the best...ever! :)

    Author's Response: I did think that was funny too. Thanks!
Title: Ephesians 4:26 25 May 2007 5:54 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    GREAT ending! Really. Best cutoff I've read in awhile. I liked the potions. Funny effects, but where would Harry have learned the whole soundtrack to Camelot? XD LOL.

    I loved this: "It wouldn’t make Harry drowsy so much as it would… make him higher than a muggle kite." LOL! Oh poor Harry. I liked Snape's observations a lot.

    I did notice some typos:

    "...he looked up from the book to see Professor Snape sitting in one of the armchairs with a book of his on."
    own.

    "'Harry nodded and hurried out to put it away. In his room, he set them on his nightstand..." it on his nightstand

    "“Oh” Harry nodded. He waited until Snape started eating before he dug in. His potions were small..." portions

    "Roasted chicken and vegetables, cottage cheese, and a bread roll." Might want to add "were on is plate"

    "Has full as the day had been..." As

    "His awareness showed with his embarrassed silence the faint redness that showed on his neck and face whenever he remembered something he’d done the other two days." This is hard to understand.

    I think that that was it! Fantastic chapter. :D I want to see Harry fly! Will Snape fly with him? I liked how Snape gave Harry the book his mum loved. That was so sweet. Thanks for posting!

    Author's Response:

    Wonderful review. I brought up a new window so I could make the edits that you had pointed out.

    As for Camelot... er.... let's say that Aunt Petunia had a mild crush on Richard Harris and listened to the soundtrack alot... on full blast so that the whole family had to hear. *L*

Title: Ephesians 4:26 25 May 2007 1:14 am
Reviewer: Alexis8907 (Signed) [Report This]
    Excellent chapter! :)

    Author's Response: thank you very much!
Title: Ephesians 4:26 24 May 2007 8:20 pm
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    There were several fun portions of this chapter. I'm wondering if you are going to accept Snape as a half-blood as per canon, or whether he will be pureblooded. I'm getting clues both ways in this story. I hope the muggle kitchen will be further explained. And if they have electricity for appliances, they should be able to actually watch Star Wars at some point. ;-)

    Author's Response:

    Ah... Snape will confirm it one way or the other when Harry is aware of the truth and Snape and he have a talk. Hmmm.... maybe they COULD watch Star Wars..... I think you might have given me an idea for something later on. Good on you.

Title: John 14:2 24 May 2007 7:53 pm
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    It was a relief not to have all the errors in this chapter. It seemed that you are going to make Harry a fairly open type of person in this story. I'm intrigued by the work out room and the fact that Harry is now an heir of Slytherin. That is always fun.

    Author's Response:

    Don't be too intrigued by the work out room. Whenever I write a story that involves a new house, I draw it out first so that I don't forget where everything is and then write something totally different one chapter than in another chapter. I just had an extra space in the house and needed to fill it.... plus, Snapes kinda a pale guy and I figure he doesn't really work out in the sun too much so he probably gets his exercise inside.

    hehe.... the heir of Slytherin. Yeah i thought that would be great fun.


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