Potions and Snitches
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Reviews For Heat Wave
Title: Chapter 1 22 Jul 2022 12:58 am
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    I loved the opening chapter! It was long and eventful.
Title: Chapter 1 06 Oct 2011 9:58 am
Reviewer: The Indian Patriot (Signed) [Report This]
    hi Ebb, it is Avada Kedavra, not Avada Kadavra
Title: Chapter 1 31 Aug 2009 1:01 am
Reviewer: AmazingGrace36 (Signed) [Report This]
    I am enjoying this story so far and am looking forward to the next chapter.

    I did find some mistakes, however. First of all, writing "FLASHBACK" and "END FLASHBACK" is a pet peeve of mine and, in my opinion, ruins the flow of the story. If you put the flashback in italics, people will figure it out. They're smarter than you think. Also, I believe Nott is the death eater, not Knot. Lily Potter, similarily, is spelled "Lily," not "Lilly." That's another pet peeve of mine. There were some other small spelling, grammar, and sentence structure mistakes as well. Your characterization was nice, though. And, overall, this is very good.
Title: Chapter 1 05 Sep 2007 12:44 am
Reviewer: tabbycat (Signed) [Report This]
    This is amazing! The relationship is perfect - not suddenly nice, like sometimes. Way more believable. I like the way you introduced the patronus messaging ability - the suddeness of patronus stuff by everyone(!) was never really explained.

    Author's Response: lol. Thank you for the wonderful review!! :) I would love to see the patronus charm more on film - I haven't seen the fifth movie yet. ;) I think that was my motivation for putting it in there...plus it's just a COOL spell. lol. I had to work hard on getting their relationship to be believable and take a while to mature. Thank you for your confidence that I achieved my goal. ;)!
Title: Chapter 1 17 Jun 2007 7:59 pm
Reviewer: smelly cat (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I love it!!! Go peaves!! LOL

    Author's Response: Heehee...yep! Thank you for the great review. :)
Title: Chapter 1 04 Jun 2007 4:47 am
Reviewer: Ann (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Extemely good first chapter. I lot happened. I like a story that moves well.

    Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review!!! I tried to have as much happen in the first chapter so that I could change a canon-ish reailty into my own fast. ;) I love taking what we know about the characters and how we know that they will act and then using that to change them in an unexpected way and put a new twist on how they COULD be. :)
Title: Chapter 1 01 Jun 2007 5:12 am
Reviewer: Emma Lipardi (Signed) [Report This]
    I would like more. Please?

    Harry needs to get away from it all. I hope this gives him the rest he needs.

    One or two word mix-ups. Addition should be edition. Otherwise, well written and good grammar throughout.

    Emma

    Author's Response: Yes, I am very sorry about the words that are confused....I don't have spellcheck on my computer. :p So I'm doing it all by ear. lol. I will try to improve. Thank you for the review! More is on the way. :)
Title: Chapter 1 28 May 2007 12:41 am
Reviewer: Tracy (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow! That was fantastic! First, I LOVE angst and you write it beautifully! Harry's pain at the loss of his family was so poignant. Even though part of him knows that he would never have earned their love or approval, now that they are dead, not even the possibility exists any longer.

    I love how torn Snape becomes after spending time with Harry. He wants to much to hold onto all his old grudges and hatred, and yet his nobility of character won't let him. Of course it becomes all but impossible for him to keep a proper resentment going once he learns of the murder of Harry's family.

    Dumbledore and all the other characters were beautifully written too! I avidly look forward to the continuation of this story hon! By the way, thank you also for your support of my story.

    Tracy

    Author's Response: Oooooh, another angst lover!!! Wonderful! ;) Thank you for the stunning review!
Title: Chapter 1 14 May 2007 7:57 pm
Reviewer: blue artemis (Signed) [Report This]
    I like this quite a bit. Please give me more!

    Author's Response: Your wish is my command...at least, our goals are the same for the moment. ;) More coming!!
Title: Chapter 1 14 May 2007 7:39 pm
Reviewer: Casey (Anonymous) [Report This]
    That was rely good, it was long which is always a bonus lol. I got down half the page and i was like whoa i'v got loads more to read. You'v got more written? Yay! Update soon plz.

    Author's Response: I LUV to read long, long good fics. I wanted mine to fit into at least ONE catagory! LoL.

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