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Reviews For Heat Wave
I did find some mistakes, however. First of all, writing "FLASHBACK" and "END FLASHBACK" is a pet peeve of mine and, in my opinion, ruins the flow of the story. If you put the flashback in italics, people will figure it out. They're smarter than you think. Also, I believe Nott is the death eater, not Knot. Lily Potter, similarily, is spelled "Lily," not "Lilly." That's another pet peeve of mine. There were some other small spelling, grammar, and sentence structure mistakes as well. Your characterization was nice, though. And, overall, this is very good.
Author's Response: lol. Thank you for the wonderful review!! :) I would love to see the patronus charm more on film - I haven't seen the fifth movie yet. ;) I think that was my motivation for putting it in there...plus it's just a COOL spell. lol. I had to work hard on getting their relationship to be believable and take a while to mature. Thank you for your confidence that I achieved my goal. ;)!
Author's Response: Heehee...yep! Thank you for the great review. :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review!!! I tried to have as much happen in the first chapter so that I could change a canon-ish reailty into my own fast. ;) I love taking what we know about the characters and how we know that they will act and then using that to change them in an unexpected way and put a new twist on how they COULD be. :)
Harry needs to get away from it all. I hope this gives him the rest he needs. One or two word mix-ups. Addition should be edition. Otherwise, well written and good grammar throughout. Emma Author's Response: Yes, I am very sorry about the words that are confused....I don't have spellcheck on my computer. :p So I'm doing it all by ear. lol. I will try to improve. Thank you for the review! More is on the way. :)
I love how torn Snape becomes after spending time with Harry. He wants to much to hold onto all his old grudges and hatred, and yet his nobility of character won't let him. Of course it becomes all but impossible for him to keep a proper resentment going once he learns of the murder of Harry's family. Dumbledore and all the other characters were beautifully written too! I avidly look forward to the continuation of this story hon! By the way, thank you also for your support of my story. Tracy Author's Response: Oooooh, another angst lover!!! Wonderful! ;) Thank you for the stunning review!
Author's Response: Your wish is my command...at least, our goals are the same for the moment. ;) More coming!!
Author's Response: I LUV to read long, long good fics. I wanted mine to fit into at least ONE catagory! LoL. |
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