So nice that Harry looks like his true self. I’m glad we didn’t have to wait!
| Title: True Appearances
| 17 Feb 2019 8:47 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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I’m surprised how quickly Severus has accepted Harry’s version of events but he will warm to him as now looks like him. Thank you
Tall, gangly, black hair, black eyes.... Ron's going to pitch a fit.
--his
| Title: True Appearances
| 15 Feb 2014 5:15 pm
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| Reviewer: AngelWitch (Anonymous)
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...and you actually care about not making Sev into a warm-hearted, doting, I-love-the-whole-world kinda guy, like a lot of fics do! *gives standing ovation*
My husband, who is tall, remembers very clearly how painful it was for him at 14 when he grew into his adult height. His legs were what really hurt: those long leg bones growing.
| Title: True Appearances
| 07 May 2008 10:03 pm
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| Reviewer: honilee@LJ (Anonymous)
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Love how the potion's hot pink!
| Title: True Appearances
| 14 Jan 2008 9:10 am
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| Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous)
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Another very good chapter, with excellent character interactions, and dialogue. We are getting more and more curious about Tobias, not to mention Eileen.
"in laboured gasp" (gasps);
"Severus defended" (a common fanfic locution, but it's awful, because there's no object. Should be: "Severus defended himself");
"triad" (tirade);
"you want people like [you] because" (you is missing);
"You're the one who brought it up" Actually, this isn't correct; Severus brought it up, not Harry.
| Title: True Appearances
| 21 Dec 2007 6:33 pm
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| Reviewer: claudia (Anonymous)
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I understand the need in your story but I hate to see Harry's green eyes go. It's the physical feature I like most about him.
oh wow! I love it! muah ha ha, the descriptions of Harry now are awesome, and I love your Tobia character. I like how Snape is viewing Harry now, less of James' son. The Muggle psychology school was a little weird, but kind of fun. :) I really enjoyed this chapter.
There were a lot of typos, and some missing words, and commas though. You should go back and edit it. Without the errors I think I'd give this an 8.
"When he got back he stared at his bed for a long moment whishing for something..." it's wishing. :)
"...I can brew that will make the changes occur all most instantly." almost
"I'll start on it after breakfast, it's really a rather simply potion..." simple
"Honestly, Severus, let the boy talk with out your commentary" without
Missing commas: "Harry continued to glare unaware as to how childish he looked." ...to glare, unaware...
"And the only cloths I ever had..." clothes
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad your enjoying the story. I have a beta now so the latter chapter (after 10) are now beta'ed. Thanks again.
| Title: True Appearances
| 27 May 2007 7:54 am
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| Reviewer: 29926 (Anonymous)
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'Your' and 'you're' are NOT the same word. This isn't the first time I've seen you make this error in this story. You should think reading over what you write. Despite being an otherwise good story, I gave your story a rating of '5' (average) because of this.
Author's Response: I apoligize for the typo's, but I now have a beta.
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