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Reviews For Brothers and Fathers
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pretty much [in] the same pattern (the 'in' is superfluous); at the Dursley's (Dursleys'--this *is* a possessive) die-hard (this is not a person, so no hyphen) "he needed to talk about the Dursley's" (Dursleys--this is *not* a possessive); "cloths" (clothes) "prespective" (respective); "straitening" (straightening); "before Harry, Tobias blamed it on beginner's luck, while Severus suspected him of cheating, won the game" (this is a terrific sentence which needs dashes rather than commas to read easily: "before Harry--Tobias blamed it on beginner's luck, while Severus suspected him of cheating--won the game"); "just where do you think your going" (you're) "his work probable wouldn't be done" (probably); "aftereffects" (should be after effects); "I'm ground for a week" (grounded) Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for the grammar tips, but I must point out this chapter has not been completely beta'd yet. Thanks for the review! Hope you enjoy the rest of the story!
It´d be very sad if he gives up on Harry, but undestandable at the same time if he is an old person. I mean teenagers are dificult to dealt; there will be more arguments in the future and fightings too; young people (I include myself ;) are very energetics, they are moving and changing every second, and that`s dificult to follow... I´ll be waiting for the next update Keep writing Lynx_lw Author's Response: Thanks. I'm sure you'll enjoy the rest of the story, and thank you so much for reviewing.
Author's Response: Thanks. More is on the way.
Author's Response: More is on the way I promise. Also, I agree, Tobias is exactly what Harry needs. |
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