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Title: Can't Be Perfect 19 Jan 2024 2:35 am
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    I’m surprised Harry didn’t yell something like, “you’re not my father, I don’t even know you!” He really is assimilating quickly.
Title: Can't Be Perfect 17 Feb 2019 8:58 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Rules sure good for Harry I loved the card playing
Title: Can't Be Perfect 24 Sep 2015 8:30 pm
Reviewer: hisnhers (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh.... Harry left the house after being grounded? My parents were big on grounding and lectures, but that would have earned me a spanking for sure.

    --his
Title: Can't Be Perfect 14 Jan 2008 9:40 am
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Harry acting up is quite characteristic--and funny. I liked Tobias making a discipline mistake--he is not all-knowing.

    pretty much [in] the same pattern (the 'in' is superfluous);

    at the Dursley's (Dursleys'--this *is* a possessive)

    die-hard (this is not a person, so no hyphen)

    "he needed to talk about the Dursley's" (Dursleys--this is *not* a possessive);

    "cloths" (clothes)

    "prespective" (respective);

    "straitening" (straightening);

    "before Harry, Tobias blamed it on beginner's luck, while Severus suspected him of cheating, won the game" (this is a terrific sentence which needs dashes rather than commas to read easily: "before Harry--Tobias blamed it on beginner's luck, while Severus suspected him of cheating--won the game");

    "just where do you think your going" (you're)

    "his work probable wouldn't be done" (probably);

    "aftereffects" (should be after effects);

    "I'm ground for a week" (grounded)

    Author's Response:

    Hi! Thanks for the grammar tips, but I must point out this chapter has not been completely beta'd yet.

    Thanks for the review! Hope you enjoy the rest of the story!

Title: Can't Be Perfect 10 Jun 2007 9:07 am
Reviewer: celestialuna (Signed) [Report This]
    good chapter.
Title: Can't Be Perfect 28 May 2007 10:50 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Fantastic chpater! I loved it! Harry's new appearance is very intersting. I really like how he's keeping his real, old name. it feels right. I liked how they played a game, and Harry's tantrums are just great. The last line was really good. :) I'm enjoying this story muchly!
Title: Can't Be Perfect 27 May 2007 3:50 am
Reviewer: lynx_lw (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I like the personality of your Tobias. He seems a very nice person but very strict at the same time, quite fitting.
    It´d be very sad if he gives up on Harry, but undestandable at the same time if he is an old person. I mean teenagers are dificult to dealt; there will be more arguments in the future and fightings too; young people (I include myself ;) are very energetics, they are moving and changing every second, and that`s dificult to follow...
    I´ll be waiting for the next update
    Keep writing
    Lynx_lw

    Author's Response: Thanks. I'm sure you'll enjoy the rest of the story, and thank you so much for reviewing.
Title: Can't Be Perfect 27 May 2007 3:26 am
Reviewer: Alexis8907 (Signed) [Report This]
    Excellent chapter! Shame on Harry though for continuing to argue. Please write more soon!

    Author's Response: Thanks. More is on the way.
Title: Can't Be Perfect 27 May 2007 1:04 am
Reviewer: teddylonglong (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow, exactly what Harry needs :-). I like your story very much - please update soon!

    Author's Response: More is on the way I promise. Also, I agree, Tobias is exactly what Harry needs.

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