Lovely chapter. I liked the switching between scenes.
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| 17 Feb 2019 9:55 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you an excellent chapter
| Title: Getting To Know You
| 14 Jan 2008 10:32 pm
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| Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous)
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I really liked the cross-cutting style here, very skillfully done, especially as it had an emotional point--the contrast between Tobias in militant mode (with Severus) and nuturing mode (with Harry). Also liked Harry's nightmare.
collard (collared);
about two sizes to big (too big);
fifteen year old (this is usually hyphened, thus: fifteen-year-old);
started yelling at him to (him, too);
why not sell books (you could add a ? at the end of this sentence, it would help the scan);
I'm hear (here);
he forbid me (forbade)
Author's Response: I was experimenting with the styl. I'm glad you liked it. You're actually the first to comment on it so thank you :)
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| 28 May 2007 11:45 am
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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Whooo! Great chapter! I don't mind Serenity. She's rather growing on me. :)
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| 28 May 2007 9:43 am
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| Reviewer: jane (Anonymous)
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i liked your story until serenity. no offence, i just dont like oc's. (im here to read about harry and severus after all) anyway, nice story (up to this point any way) i wont be reading any more, but keep writing.
take care,
jane
His favorite book is One Flew Over the Cuckoo's NEst? Well thats certainly interesting. I wouldn't have figured Snape the type to like that book but it works though, :)
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