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Title: Brothers Bonding 20 Jan 2024 1:12 am
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    I appreciated how you addressed Harry becoming so reliant on Tobias and embracing his new family so quickly!
Title: Brothers Bonding 18 Feb 2019 7:35 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Lovely chapter I love how Severus dealt with Harry’s problems
Title: Brothers Bonding 24 Sep 2015 9:34 pm
Reviewer: hisnhers (Signed) [Report This]
    Severus is a good big brother.

    --his
Title: Brothers Bonding 15 Jan 2008 9:37 am
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Lots of good stuff here: Tobias' identical interviews with his sons (very funny); the fragmentary phone call (you have a very good natural ear); and Harry's question before he confides in Severus: "Will you be nicer this year?" Right on the money, that was.

    Always did cut right point (always did cut right to the point);

    those of Harry's (this is a double possessive--should be those of Harry);

    Tobias messaged his temples (massaged);

    more then capable (than);

    Harry's presences (presence);

    Where are we going (needs a ?);

    to do the chores he gave (you);

    Besides I double (doubt);

    How long will you be gone (needs a ?);

    still whined-up in bed (beautiful Freudian trip; it's wind up);

    It didn't make any sense--he just met his dad--he shouldn't feel like this (added the dashes so it scans);

    a broken jar not to far away (too);

    spoken to he boy (the);

    he buried his head his knees (guessing it's between?)

    Author's Response:

    Thank you! The identical interviews were fun to write.

    Thanks for the review!

Title: Brothers Bonding 28 May 2007 12:07 pm
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow, great chapter! I loved it! What a delectable little stpry. I ope that you will be getting these early chapters beta'd soon though. :)

    I'm really enjoying this story!

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