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Reviews For Brothers and Fathers
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Always did cut right point (always did cut right to the point); those of Harry's (this is a double possessive--should be those of Harry); Tobias messaged his temples (massaged); more then capable (than); Harry's presences (presence); Where are we going (needs a ?); to do the chores he gave (you); Besides I double (doubt); How long will you be gone (needs a ?); still whined-up in bed (beautiful Freudian trip; it's wind up); It didn't make any sense--he just met his dad--he shouldn't feel like this (added the dashes so it scans); a broken jar not to far away (too); spoken to he boy (the); he buried his head his knees (guessing it's between?) Author's Response: Thank you! The identical interviews were fun to write. Thanks for the review!
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