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Reviews For Brothers and Fathers
Cute chapter. Glad Harry responded so quickly to Tobias. --his
I particularly liked the bit where you said, "the children went upstairs to pla...err...entertain themselves." excruciatingly slow(ly); Dumbledore(-)like; Tobias's (Tobias'); motivated then him (than); messaged his abused throat (massaged); not so shocked (ing); in the America's (Americas--it's not possessive); twin's potion (twins'); were more astound (astounded); to s(t)ay here the night. Author's Response: Thanks!
Awesome, awesome story so far! I really loved this part, when Ron and Harry met: "They stopped face to face, literally: Harry had grown enough that he and Ron were the same height." Yay! Being young for Two weeks! Awesome. This should be really fun. I think it might be cool if Harry reaged a couple of days before Severus. Could be fun to explore that possibility, or maybe create an AU one-shot? Sirius was a surprise, but not that much. I feel for him, I really do. He should love Harry, but he is immature. Why doesn't Harry still like him? He should at least. I felt that it was a little off that Harry didn't try to get Tobias off of Sirius when he was choking him, but maybe Harry was stunned. Doesn't Sirius WANT Harry anymore? I thought that as soon as the potion landed on Severus, that Molly should have been furious with the twins and laid into them. It seemed a little off that she didn't XD But awesome twist! I'm loving it! Great job!
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