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Title: It Takes Two 22 Jan 2024 12:33 am
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    I’m so glad Tobias is seeing Eileen’s effect on Severus. He’s been so kind, stern, and levelheaded so far, but loses his compass around her. The scene with little Sev was heartbreaking.
Title: It Takes Two 19 Feb 2019 8:44 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    I feel sorry for Tobias. He is torn between being a father and a husband, thank you for showing the difficulty so well.
Title: It Takes Two 21 Jan 2008 7:45 am
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Severus does what kids usually do; if they can't get positive attention, they'll get the negative variety.

    Undoubtedly, though, Severus' relationship with his mother has caused trouble for him. Harry, OTOH, did have a positive bond with a mum for 15 months--which may be why he hopes Eileen will stay. Neither kid is old or wise enough to know that Eileen's character isn't going to change, and her inability to tolerate routine in ingrained.

    Tobias knows S & H are acting oddly, and so does Eileen. He dismisses it (his Gryffindor side) and she is not really interested.

    there (their) pranks;

    formally (formerly) abused;

    Severus and Harry's plan (Severus');

    she was (felt) compelled;

    ten(-)year(-)olds;

    that (it) all wasn't just a dream;

    meter's (meters);

    "Yes, sir," ground out Severus

    runaway is a noun; run away is a verb;

    Author's Response:

    I'm glad I was able to realistically portray S & H.

    Thanks for the review!

Title: It Takes Two 19 Jun 2007 6:13 pm
Reviewer: snakechild (Signed) [Report This]
    i just found your story
    it was great but i don't like Eileen it seems like she loves them but then again it dosn't.....she's just evil
    but the storys good write more please
Title: It Takes Two 16 Jun 2007 10:03 pm
Reviewer: Kateri (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Oh, poor lil Sev. Great chapter
Title: It Takes Two 16 Jun 2007 5:58 pm
Reviewer: angel (Anonymous) [Report This]
    i think that snapes character is perfect the way u write it.
Title: It Takes Two 16 Jun 2007 5:12 pm
Reviewer: kittykat91419 (Signed) [Report This]
    You have an interesting plot here, but I think it would be better as a work of original fiction, because I don't think Tobias, Severus or Harry has the background to be what you want them to be. I also think that more insight into the minds of everyone (a reaction, a thought, a quelled instinctive reaction, i.e. Vernon often calls Harry "Boy" in canon, therefore we would assume Harry's reaction to the term would not be pleasant. He should flinch or prevent the flinch several times when Tobias uses the term before making the adjustment, if ever.) Also, there are a lot of technical and spelling mistakes: "cloths" (washcloths?) instead of "clothes," "to" instead of "too," etc. Punctuation mistakes are frequent through the story, i.e. missing commas, semi-colons where they don't belong, etc. That being said, your plot for this story is a great one. Some parts are clearly inspired by outside influences (which is okay), and some ideas are clearly your own, most especially Tobias as a character and Severus as a psychologist. Keep writing, but I think you'd do better writing original fiction than fanfiction because of how you develop your characters.
Title: It Takes Two 16 Jun 2007 9:27 am
Reviewer: KimSpiritTalks (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh good! Tobias finally saw the light. Very good chapter. I loved the prank, too!
Title: It Takes Two 16 Jun 2007 12:30 am
Reviewer: Alexis8907 (Signed) [Report This]
    Another absolutly excellent chapter! I love the pranks they played on Eileen too. :)
Title: It Takes Two 15 Jun 2007 11:05 am
Reviewer: rosworms (Signed) [Report This]
    oh this chapter made my chest ache. Poor Severus. Wonderful writing.

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