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Reviews For Brothers and Fathers
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The boys saluting their Dad is another nice moment, as is his mixed feelings about their reaging; Harry's concern about what he's told the ten-year-old Severus is also good; as is Severus' feelings in the matter. their (they're) reaged; deadly quite (quiet) voice; houses (house's) occupants; leaving, Harry alone with the adults...(No, he's not alone, and the comma's misplaced, so: "...leaving Harry with the adults...") twins(') room; quit(e) a bit of respect; to his son's (sons); a bit faster then (than) expected; Hypothetically(-)speaking; fifteen-year-old; Eileen crawling into bed (thinking) that her life... Author's Response: Thanks! You're one of the few people who like the scene between Tobias and Eilleen. Most thought it seemed out of place. Thanks for the review!
Other than that question, I LOVE the story. The characterizations are excellent. Snape is not fluffy as he becomes in some stories. And you get a chance to see where some of his stern nature comes from. Keep up the great writing.
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